SAT Writing : Improving Paragraphs

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Example Question #441 : Improving Paragraphs

1 As anyone who has tried it can tell you, Filipino food is an exciting intriguing blend of flavors. 2 Due to interaction with various nations and cultures, it’s cuisine is marked by influences from Austronesia, Spain, China, Malaysia, and the United States. 3 Some typical dishes including pancit, longganisa, lumpia, kare-kare, pinakbet, sinigang, and adobo. 4 For example, one could find everything from Spanish paella and Chinese spring rolls (locally called lumpia) if you walked into a Filipino restaurant.

5 Another important compound of Filipino cuisine is street food. 6 These street foods include many fried foods, such as bananas, plantains, dumplings, squid balls, battered quail eggs, and fruit or vegetable spring rolls.7 Taho, a warm street food, is composed of bean curd, a caramel syrup or arnibal, and tapioca pearls.8 Don’t forget dessert! 9 With such a variety of flavors, textures, and cooking styles, there’s certainly to be something for every gourmand.

Which of the following statements best describes the purpose of Sentence 6 in the passage?

Possible Answers:

Providing examples of the wide variety of national cuisines available in the Phillipines

Providing examples of street food, and supporting the statement that street food is an important part of the nation cuisine

Providing evidence against the assertion that street food is a limited part of any national cuisine

Providing examples of street food, and supporting the argument that fried food is an important part of the average Filipino diet

None of these statements accurately describe the purpose of the sentence.

Correct answer:

Providing examples of street food, and supporting the statement that street food is an important part of the nation cuisine

Explanation:

Sentence 6 enumerates a number of examples of Filipino individual Filipino street foods, and in so doing both provides content, and helps to justify the statement that street food is an important component of the nations cuisine in generalo

Example Question #442 : Improving Paragraphs

1 Although vegetarianism is sometimes considered a recent phenomenon, the practice actually has roots in both ancient India and ancient Greece. 2 In Greece, being vegetarian was a way to abstain from eating ‘beings with souls,’ and vegetarianism was primarily practiced by small religious sects or certain philosophical thinkers. 3 Ancient Indian vegetarianism may have been more widespread, as it was mandatory for many Hindus, Jains, and Buddhists. 4 Buddhist scholars argue whether Gautama Buddha ever ate meat. 5 Obviously, vegetarianism is a constantly evolution practice that has changed considerably over the past several thousand years.

6 During the Middle Ages, vegetarianism remained largely outside the cultural milieu in Europe. 7 Certain aseptic religious sects may have avoided eating meat, but the practice didn’t truly gain ground in Western Europe until the Age of Enlightenment. 8 During and before that time, many people still argued that animals existed only for the benefit of humankind. 9 They were opposed by other people who thought that that was an anthropocentric viewpoint.

10 Over time, vegetarianism gradually gained diction with influential thinkers and by the twentieth century, organizations such as the International Vegetarian Union, the North American Vegetarian Society, and the Animal Aid were appearing. 11 What new form will vegetarianism take in the future?

In the context of the passage, what is the best definition for the underlined word “sects” in Sentence 2?

Possible Answers:

nonbelievers

stereotypes

dissidents

subgroups

hierarchies

Correct answer:

subgroups

Explanation:

The word “sect” is used to refer to a smaller –and often more extreme– group within a religion or belief system. These sects are sometimes seen as heretical by members of the larger religious group, but not always.

Example Question #31 : New Sat Writing And Language

The Moluccas is a chain, or archetype, of islands belonging to Indonesia. Historically, these islands were known as the Spice Islands for their abundance of nutmeg, cloves, mace, and pepper, this profundity of spices eventually drew colonial attention. Spices such as cloves, cinnamon, cardamom, anise, and pepper were particularly popular during the medieval times. In the 1600s, the Spice Wars arose as a result of competing Portuguese and Dutch interest’s in the Spice Islands. The bloody conflict ended in the deaths of many native Moluccans as well as European traders, wherefore both Portugal and the Netherlands gained and lost territories ranging from Africa and South America. For this day, strife occasionally breaks out on the islands although it is now motivated by religious and not colonial disagreements. It is located just west of New Guinea in the Pacific Ocean, and its more than 1,000 islands are home to more than 2 million people today.

Which of the following provides the most relevant detail to the underlined section?

Possible Answers:

during medieval times, during which time scientific developments were extremely limited

during medieval times, which are defined by historians as running from approximately the 5th to the 15th centuries CE.

during medieval times, when horses were most people's primary form of transportation

NO CHANGE

during medieval times, which were generally very physically uncomfortable, and therefore needed to be "spiced up."

Correct answer:

during medieval times, which are defined by historians as running from approximately the 5th to the 15th centuries CE.

Explanation:

In order to answer this question, the first step is to identify the purpose of the sentence, which in this case is to provide the contextually relevant details of trade in the islands during a specific time period. The best answer, thus provides specific, accurate details about the dates of the time period in question. The sentence was not concerned with neither (highly unspecific) "scientific developments" nor "modes of transportation" so these answers can be immediately eliminated. One might be temped by the answer that mentions "spice" but note that this sentence does not actually provide relevant content, and by using a colloquial phrase ("spiced up") to make a lame pun, really does not match the matter-of-fact tone of the sentence preceding it.

Example Question #131 : Improving And Correcting Sentences

Although a work of fiction, Mariama Bâ's 1979 novel, So Long a Letter is also, in a sense, a manifesto of the female African experience, one that has all too often been consigned to a footnote in history books. Within the overarching colonial narrative of African marginalization, black women have been marginalized farther. In their respective accounts, Jomo Kenyatta and Franz Fanon put their own words in the mouths of female subjects: in more objective histories, women are hardly spoken of at all. By taking a comparative approach, however, the history of African women in the colonial and post-colonial eras can be patched together into something comprehensible. With Bâ’s voice as a guide, a more complex narrative comes out of the darkness of historical silence and bias to revealing significant degrees of female agency and expression.

Replace the bolded and underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

Possible Answers:

marginalized farther

marginalized further

marginalized, farther

marginalized fewer

marginalized less

Correct answer:

marginalized further

Explanation:

“Farther” refers to measurable distances, whereas “further” is used figuratively. In this case, the marginalization described is being taken further, not farther, because it is becoming more intense or extreme. The inclusion of a comma is unnecessary, which rules out “marginalized, farther.” “Marginalized fewer” and “marginalized less” both contradict the meaning of the original phrase. “Marginalized further,” then, is the correct answer.

Example Question #2987 : Sat Writing

 [1] The Magna Carta was a charter issued in 1215 that limited a king’s power and said that no one, even a king, was above the law. [2] Before it was passed, the English people were upset that King John was ignoring their complaints. [3] They threatened King John and he agreed to sign the Magna Carta, limiting his powers and giving more to the lords. [4] The Magna Carta exemplified the political values of limited government and rule of law. [5] In fact, Magna Carta is Latin for "The Great Charter." [6] The Magna Carta affected the American political system because America ended up taking on those same values. [7] In America, the president can’t do whatever he or she wants; he or she has to work with Congress. [8] In addition, the president, like the king of England, is not above the law. [9] For example, if the president speeds then he or she will get a ticket, just like anyone else who speeds. [10] The Magna Carta could be the earliest influence on the American political system and the Constitution.

Replace the bolded and underlined portion with the answer choice that is consistent with the formal tone of the passage while retaining the meaning of the original sentence. 

Possible Answers:

can't do anything that he or she wants to

can do whatever he or she wants

can make decisions unilaterally

can't make decisions unilaterally 

can't do whatever he or she wants

Correct answer:

can't make decisions unilaterally 

Explanation:

The answer is "can't make decisions unilaterally" because saying "whatever he or she wants" or "anything he or she wants" would be too casual for a formal paragraph. The reason why it is "can't make decisions unilaterally" instead of "can make decisions unilaterally" is because doing something unilaterally means to do something on one's own and the president cannot make decisions on his or her own. 

Example Question #11 : Rewriting A Sentence Fragment

1 The job of the cryptozoologist is a taciturn one for sure. 2 Being unlike ordinary zoologists, that study the behaviors and lives of a cathartic variety of animals, cryptozoologists track down mythical animals whose existence has never or rarely been proven.

3 There is the Congolese J'ba FoFi, an enormous spider with legs allegedly over three feet long, the mokèlé-mbèmbé, a deadly African water dinosaur, and the phantom cat, an abnormally large feline found in various improbably places. 4 The origins of the word “cryptozoologist” come from the ancient Greek, crypto meaning “hidden” and “zoo” meaning animal. 5 Some of the most famous of these mythical animals or cryptids are Bigfoot, the Loch Ness monster, and Chupacabra. 6 Many denizens consider cryptozoologists to be pseudoscientists; but, they believe that the discipline’s reliance on anecdotal evidence does not exclude it from the world of serious science.

7 Many of these animals seem too incredible to be believed and yes evidence is often flimsy, but the existence of fossil records sometimes provide evidence to the contrary. 8 As such many doubters attempt to machinate the cryptids’ existence, but cryptozoologists aim to abolish their skepticism.

How should the underlined portion of Sentence 6 be rewritten?

Possible Answers:

they believe which the discipline’s

they believed that the discipline’s

cryptozoologists believed which the discipline’s

they believe that the discipline’s (no change)

cryptozoologists believe that the discipline’s

Correct answer:

cryptozoologists believe that the discipline’s

Explanation:

The problem with this phrase is the unclear pronoun referent “they.” To avoid potential misunderstanding, replace the pronoun with the noun to which it refers. The verb choice does not need to be changed, and “that” is the correct word to follow “believe” here.

Example Question #11 : Rewriting A Sentence Fragment

1 What is to be done about the problem of shoplifting. 2 Small security devices hidden in the tags of expensive clothing, clearly posted signs vocalizing the penalties for shoplifting, and “spider tags” or wired alarm clips all measures that store owners can take. 3 However many can be removed turgidly with magnets, scissors, or other means.

4 Other solutions including using attentive employees, clear and wide aisles, security guards, and security cameras. 5 With self-checkouts, an additional degree of honesty comes into play. 6 Though, it might be more fruition to examine the motives for shoplifting, as more lugubrious social policies could prevent people from needing to shoplift in the first place.

In Sentence 4, how should “security guards” be changed?

Possible Answers:

store guards

security guards (no change)

secure guards

savage guards

safe guards

Correct answer:

store guards

Explanation:

To avoid repeating “security” twice in one sentence, come up with a reasonable word to put in its place. Since repeating the word is redundant, no change is not correct. Of the provided options, only "store guards" makes contextual and grammatical sense. 

Example Question #443 : Improving Paragraphs

There once was a shepherd boy whom sat on the hillside watching the village sheep. He was hot and exhausted fanning himself, rapidly in a feeble attempt to cool himself down. On top of that, he had never been so bored before. To amuse himself, he decided to play a joke. He put his hands around his mouth and yelled in a loud voice, "Wolf! Wolf! A wolf is chasing the sheep!”

They came running. They asked the boy, “What’s going on? Did you yell ‘A wolf is chasing the sheep?’”

The boy laughed. “It was just a joke, everyone.”

The people fumed, but they all returned to their homes.

The next day, the boy bored again decided to amuse himself again. He bellowed, “Wolf! Wolf!” Again, the townspeople came running. Once they arrived and witnessed the laughing boy, they realized they’d been tricked a second time. Nonetheless, they returned home and irritated resolved to never fall for the trick again for third time.

The next day, the boy was watching his sheep. Suddenly, out of nowhere, a wolf appeared from behind the bushes. With its teeth bared, the boy cowered as the wolf approached the sheep. Terrified, he called, “Help! A wolf! A wolf is here!” The people ignored his cries. “That mischievous boy,” they all said to one another. “He must think he can fool us again.” But not one of them came running.

No one was there to witness as the wolf ate every last sheep on the hillside, as the boy helplessly cowered behind a bush. As the boy hid, he shook his head. “I shall never fib again,” he resolved to himself.

Which of the following is the best alternative to the underlined phrase, "yelled in a loud voice"?

Possible Answers:

yelled, in a loud voice

yelled loudly

yelled

yelled in a loud manner

NO CHANGE

Correct answer:

yelled

Explanation:

The word "yelled" implies that the boy was doing so loudly. Therefore, the addition of "in a loud voice" is redundant. The same is true of saying "yelled in a loud manner" and "yelled loudly." The phrase can just be left as "yelled."

Example Question #15 : Rewriting A Sentence Fragment

1 One such example of regional cooking could be found in the American South. 2 Wherefore foods such as gumbo, barbecue, fried chicken, and watermelons can now be found all across the country, it was once specific to states south of the Mason-Dixon line. 3 And while Southern cuisine has been influenced by Native American tribes, Scottish immigrants, and Cajun settlers, one of the most significant culinary inspirations came from the South’s black population. 4 Dishes such as cornbread, succotash, collard or turnip greens, pimento cheese, crawfish, and sweet tea all hale from the South, as well. 5 For example, okra, black-eyed peas, and sorghum are all foods brought to America and cultivated by African slaves. 6 Soon, soul food (a sometimes contentious term among black chefs) began to be served in black-owned restaurants in the South. 7 Borne out of competing cultural influences and not-infrequent strife, it should be no surprise that Southern food remains a complex delicious cuisine to this day.

How should the underlined portion of Sentence 1 be rewritten? 

Possible Answers:

will eventually be found

could have been found

could be found (no change)

would be found

can be found

Correct answer:

can be found

Explanation:

To match the tense of the rest of the passage, the verb in Sentence 1 should be conjugated in the present tense.

Example Question #442 : Improving Paragraphs

1 Ethnography: sounds erogenous but is simply a study of a culture or group of people. 2 Originating in the field of anthropology, later becoming popular in sociology and other disciplines. 3 Ethnographies typically include: descriptions of geography, religion, economy, social behaviors, rituals and histories. 4 Most early ethnographies were written by ex-patriot European explorers traveling outside their home continent; though by some standards the Greek historian Herodotus was producing protoplasmic ethnographies hundreds of years before the Age of Exploration. 5 Ethnographies can take forms ranging from the confessional, the feminist, the critical, and the realist but most are qualitative and descriptive rather than quantitative and statistical. 6 Some attempt to provide fairly objective observations of a group or society, others have the anterior motive of empowering marginalized or repressed cultures. 7 This group or culture may include anything from a fraternity to a particular Uruguayan village. 8 Today ethnographers often immerse themselves fully in the lives of their subjects, be they powerful politicians and impoverished blue-collar workers.

How should the underlined portion of Sentence 1 be rewritten?

Possible Answers:

Ethnography: It sounds erogenous but simply it is

Ethnography: sounds erogenous but is simply (no change)

Ethnography: sounding esoteric, it is simply

Ethnography sounds erogenous but is simply

Ethnography, which sounds esoteric but is simply

Correct answer:

Ethnography sounds erogenous but is simply

Explanation:

A colon isn’t required after “Ethnography.” By deleting it, we can make the sentence a straightforward independent clause. No other changes are necessary.

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