SAT Writing : Improving Paragraphs

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Example Questions

Example Question #24 : Deleting Content

1 Unlike most languages, Esperanto was created artificially and not arrived naturally from other language’s evolution. 2 If you’ve ever traveled in a foreign country where you don’t speak the language, you’ll be familiar with the motives of the creators of Esperanto; a universal language constructed in 1887. 3 It was invented by the linguist L.L. Zamenhof, its name translating roughly to “the hopeful one,” and it was intended as a simple, neutral language that could transfer national differences and promote international harmony.

4 Implementing Esperanto, although, was more difficult than anticipated. 5 Yet more than two million people world-wide are fluent in Esperanto, far more are fluent in so-called global languages, such as English, Mandarin Chinese, Spanish, and Hindi. 6 Linguistically, Esperanto relies within a Latin alphabet and a grammar and vocabulary based primarily on Indo-European languages. 7 Luckily, free online resources, local clubs, and interminable school-sponsored instruction have kept this valuable linguistic experiment from dying out altogether.

Which sentence is least relevant to the passage and should be deleted?

Possible Answers:

Sentence 7

Sentence 3

Sentence 6

Sentence 4

Sentence 5

Correct answer:

Sentence 6

Explanation:

Sentence 6 delves into the linguistic origins of Esperanto, which is too detailed and precise for the passage’s otherwise broad introduction to the language.

Example Question #2611 : Sat Writing

1 The legend of Billy the Kid, one of the most famous outlaws of the Wild West. 2 Allied Henry McCarty and William H. Bonney, Billy the Kid was a gunfighter who was rumored to have killed nearly two dozen men in 19th century America. 3 Friendly and charming, his status was relatively unknown until a price was put on his head in 1881 by the governor of New Mexico, than a territory. 4 He lived in New York City, Indiana, Kansas, and Arizona at various points within his life. 5 Billy the Kid’s various crimes include: murder, horse thievery, stealing firearms, and escaping from jail. 6 Many of these various crimes were committed as part of his membership in Old West gangs. 7 He was finally, captured and killed by Sheriff Pat Garrett in New Mexico in 1881.

Which sentence contains a colon error?

Possible Answers:

Sentence 4

None of the sentences contains a colon error.

Sentence 6

Sentence 3

Sentence 5

Correct answer:

Sentence 5

Explanation:

Colons are only used to introduce lists if the part of the sentence preceding the list is an independent clause. In the case of Sentence 5, we don’t have a complete independent clause before the list, so no colon is needed.

Example Question #2612 : Sat Writing

1 If you’re wearing clothes right now you’re likely wearing something a sewing machine has produced. 2 But what you may not know is the history of the sewing machine that made your clothes. 3 The device was invented in England during the Industrial Revolution in the late 18th-century. 4 Greatly increasing efficiency by mechanizing the process. 5 Early machines were often used for stitching leather and canvas for various purposes including, horse tack, sails, and shoes. 6 Gradually, other machines emerged that were superior in Europe and America. 7 Famous brands today; include those by 19th century inventor Isaac Singer. 8 As the 1800s progressed sewing machines became purchases for not just clothing manufacturers but individuals. 

Which sentence should be deleted from the passage?

Possible Answers:

Sentence 6

Sentence 3

Sentence 4

Sentence 5

Sentence 7

Correct answer:

Sentence 7

Explanation:

Sentence 7 discusses contemporary sewing machines, but the rest of the passage is about early sewing machines. Since it is least relevant to the text’s main topic, Sentence 7 should be deleted.

Example Question #2613 : Sat Writing

1 The tornado, a dreaded meteorological phenomena and a verifiable force of nature. 2 But what is it really? 3 Also known as a twister or a cyclone, tornadoes are rapidly rotating funnels of air linked between a cloud and either the surface of the earth or water. 4 They are caused by the creation of strong thunderstorms by rotating columns of air, resultantly increased rainfall causes increased downward air movement. 5 Rather than the Richter scale measures the strength of hurricanes the Fujita scale measures the strength of a tornado. 6 This natural disasters’ destructive mite is commemorated in such classic films as the 1996, movie, Twister. 7 And the 2014 “Into the Storm” and even the 2013 sparse “Sharknado.” 8 The Fujita scale, also called the F-scale, was named after an employee at the University of Chicago and originally had 13 different levels.

Which sentence could be deleted from the passage without abandoning any essential information?

Possible Answers:

Sentence 2

Sentence 4

Sentence 3

Sentence 7

Sentence 1

Correct answer:

Sentence 2

Explanation:

A rhetorical question, Sentence 2 does nothing to contribute to the main ideas of the passage. While rhetorical questions can often be useful devices, this one isn’t functioning particularly well.

Example Question #2614 : Sat Writing

1 W. Somerset Maugham was a proliferate and English author of more than two dozen books. 2 Born in 1874 and orphaned at a young age, also working as an ambulance driver in World War I and studying medicine in London. 3 Among his life he traveled in Eastern Europe and Southeast Asia, within other places, these experiences were also reflected in his writing. 4 His first novel, Liza of Lambeth, drew on these real-life experiences and became an instant bestseller, when it was published, in 1897. 5 One of Maugham’s most famous works, the American writer Theodore Dreiser gave a glowing review to the 1915 novel Of Human Bondage. 6 His legacy includes many plays, film adaptations, a tumultuous love life, an epigrammatic British literary award (the Somerset Maugham Award), and a steady if unexperimental oeuvre of fiction.

What should be deleted from Sentence 6?

Possible Answers:

nothing should be deleted from the sentence

“oeuvre of fiction.”

“a tumultuous love life,”

“film adaptations,”

“legacy includes”

Correct answer:

“a tumultuous love life,”

Explanation:

The tumultuous love life was not part of Maugham’s legacy but rather his actual life, so it does not belong in this sentence.

Example Question #2615 : Sat Writing

1 Whether or not you are superstitious. 2 Fortunetelling has played a major role in many cultures.3 Also known as divination. 4 Western fortunetelling arose from the Romani people and such as reading tea leaves’, gazing into crystal balls, tarot reading, palmistry, and observing the flights, innards, or eating patterns of birds. 5 In William Shakespeare’s famous play “Julius Caesar,” for example, a soothsayer warns the soon to be assassinated Caesar to beware the Ides of March. 6 Western fortunetelling has also been influenced by Eastern divination methods such as the I Ching and to read coffee beans. 7 Unfortunately several major religions prescribe fortunetelling with very degrees of severity. 8 Despite, fortunetelling still thrives in contemporary culture, psychics and Magic-8 balls are just two of many fun ways to attempt to see into the future.

Which sentence should be deleted from the passage?

Possible Answers:

Sentence 2

Sentence 3

Sentence 5

Sentence 1

Sentence 4

Correct answer:

Sentence 1

Explanation:

In addition to being a fragment, Sentence 1 does not add anything of substance to the passage.

Example Question #2616 : Sat Writing

1 Whether or not you are superstitious. 2 Fortunetelling has played a major role in many cultures.3 Also known as divination. 4 Western fortunetelling arose from the Romani people and such as reading tea leaves’, gazing into crystal balls, tarot reading, palmistry, and observing the flights, innards, or eating patterns of birds. 5 In William Shakespeare’s famous play “Julius Caesar,” for example, a soothsayer warns the soon to be assassinated Caesar to beware the Ides of March. 6 Western fortunetelling has also been influenced by Eastern divination methods such as the I Ching and to read coffee beans. 7 Unfortunately several major religions prescribe fortunetelling with very degrees of severity. 8 Despite, fortunetelling still thrives in contemporary culture, psychics and Magic-8 balls are just two of many fun ways to attempt to see into the future.

Which sentence needs an apostrophe deleted from it?

Possible Answers:

Sentence 4

Sentence 3

Sentence 2

Sentence 6

none of these sentences

Correct answer:

Sentence 4

Explanation:

In Sentence 4, “tea leaves” should be just plural, not possessive. No apostrophes are needed in that sentence.

Example Question #2617 : Sat Writing

1 While maybe he wasn’t as well known as Bluebeard or Captain Kidd, Bill Johnston was still known as a feared pirate and river smuggler in his day.2 That day being the War of 1812. 3 You see, he came from a British Loyalist family and settled in Upper Canada before beginning a career as a Lake Ontario schooner captain, he carried legal cargo as well as smuggled tea and rum into Canada. 4 When the War of 1812 began he spied on the British for several years. 5 In 1838, his most famous escapade occurred: in the capture and burning of the enemy ship Sir Robert Peel. 6 Because Johnston was arrested many times during his life (including for this crime against the Sir Robert Peel), he always either escaped jail or was not convicted because of juries sympathetic view of his activities. 7 Many people do not know that another name for pirate is “corsair.” 8 Nevertheless, Johnston played many roles in his lifetime – everything from fugitive and corsair, criminal and hero.

Which word or phrase should be deleted from Sentence 3?

Possible Answers:

“and settled”

“You see”

“beginning”

“as a”

“as well as”

Correct answer:

“You see”

Explanation:

“You see” is an ineffective rhetorical device that not only adds nothing to the passage’s content but also carries a somewhat condescending tone.

Example Question #163 : Inserting Or Deleting Content

1 While maybe he wasn’t as well known as Bluebeard or Captain Kidd, Bill Johnston was still known as a feared pirate and river smuggler in his day.2 That day being the War of 1812. 3 You see, he came from a British Loyalist family and settled in Upper Canada before beginning a career as a Lake Ontario schooner captain, he carried legal cargo as well as smuggled tea and rum into Canada. 4 When the War of 1812 began he spied on the British for several years. 5 In 1838, his most famous escapade occurred: in the capture and burning of the enemy ship Sir Robert Peel. 6 Because Johnston was arrested many times during his life (including for this crime against the Sir Robert Peel), he always either escaped jail or was not convicted because of juries sympathetic view of his activities. 7 Many people do not know that another name for pirate is “corsair.” 8 Nevertheless, Johnston played many roles in his lifetime – everything from fugitive and corsair, criminal and hero.

Which sentence should be deleted from the passage?

Possible Answers:

None of the sentences should be deleted

Sentence 7

Sentence 1

Sentence 3

Sentence 5

Correct answer:

Sentence 7

Explanation:

While etymologically interesting, Sentence 7 does not elaborate upon any relevant point in the passage. It is not set up with any sort of introductory phrase, nor is it followed by a sentence elaborating on the point.

Example Question #2618 : Sat Writing

1 No one wants to live in the swamp. 2 But swamps are an incredibly important part of the Earth’s ecosystem. 3 They are defined as forested wetlands and can be found from Africa and Asia and in Europe and the Americas. 4 In fact: the only continent to not contained swamps is Antarctica. 5 Because swamps are rarely arid, meaning able to be farmed, and because it usually is not conducive to hunting, they are undervalued by human society. 6 In swamps, a portion of dry land that protects from the water is known as a “hammock.” 7 Moreover, swamps are actually integrity to our world, providing clean water and oxygen for people as well as breeding grounds for animals big and small. 

Which sentence should be deleted from the passage?

Possible Answers:

Sentence 6

None of the sentences should be deleted.

Sentence 5

Sentence 2

Sentence 4

Correct answer:

Sentence 6

Explanation:

Sentence 6 provides a piece of trivia rather than a helpful overview of the subject matter. Because it’s too specific to fit the rest of the passage, it should be deleted. These sorts of decontextualized "fun facts" are usually not going to enhance a thoughtfully composed paragraph of analytical writing.

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