SAT Writing : Improving Sentences
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Example Question #371 : Correcting Phrase, Clause, And Sentence Errors
Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.
The most shocking element of the film was its frank depiction of Medieval Europe violence.
the violence which took part in Medieval Europe.
the violence that is taking place in Medieval Europe.
the violence taking place for Medieval Europe.
Medieval Europe violence.
the violence that took place in Medieval Europe.
the violence that took place in Medieval Europe.
The underlined portion of the sentence is oddly worded and unwieldy. The sentence can be greatly improved by simplifying the word choice and making the meaning more clear. The best answer choice is "the violence that took place in Medieval Europe."
Example Question #372 : Correcting Phrase, Clause, And Sentence Errors
Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.
Having been that which was the one that lost, the driver congratulated his opponent.
Being that which was the one that lost,
Having been that which was that lost,
Having been that which was the one that lost,
Having been one that lost,
Having lost,
Having lost,
The underlined phrase is extremely wordy and overly confusing in its structure. The phrase needs to be simplified while keeping its intended meaning and being grammatically correct. "Having lost," is the only answer choice that does this.
Example Question #373 : Correcting Phrase, Clause, And Sentence Errors
Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.
Unlike that which was considered true in the ideas of the past, the new theory revolutionized scientific thinking.
Unlike ideas considered to be true in the past,
Unlike that which was considering true in the ideas of the past,
Unlike that which was considered truth in ideas of the past,
Unlike that which considered true in the ideas of the past,
Unlike that which was considered true in the ideas of the past,
Unlike ideas considered to be true in the past,
The underlined portion of the sentence is extremely wordy and needs to be simplified. The simplified version of the sentence, though, needs to keep the same meaning of the original sentence and be grammatically correct. The only answer choice that does this is "Unlike ideas considered to be true in the past."
Example Question #371 : Correcting Phrase, Clause, And Sentence Errors
Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.
Having been seen to be a figure like a prophet, his writings were well preserved by his followers.
Having been seen as a prophet-like
Being seen like prophet figure
Having been seen to be a figure like a prophet
Having seen a figure like a prophet
Being seen as a prophet-like figure
Being seen as a prophet-like figure
The underlined portion of the sentence is awkwardly worded and confusing. Rge entire phrase needs to be cleaned up and simplified. "Being seen as a prophet-like figure" is the answer choice that best simplifies the wording without changing its meaning.
Example Question #221 : Correcting Phrase, Clause, And Sentence Errors
Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.
Under condition of anonymity, the informant gave the testimony against the people that were once his former employers.
against people that once were former employers.
against the people that were once his former employers.
against his former employers.
against the people that once were his former employers.
against the people that were his once former employers.
against his former employers.
The underlined portion of the sentence is oddly constructed and poorly worded, although there are no grammatical problems. This portion of the sentence needs to be simplified. "Against his former employees" is the best choice among the answers.
Example Question #223 : Correcting Phrase, Clause, And Sentence Errors
Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.
Rarely does a teacher want to publicly humiliate a student in front of students making the rest of the class.
in front of students making up for the rest of the class.
in front of the rest of the students in the class.
in front the students make the class for the rest.
in front of students making the rest of the class.
in front of the students making the rest of the class.
in front of the rest of the students in the class.
The sentence as written is poorly worded, and slightly confusing because of it. The underlined portion in particular can be cleaned up to mean the same thing as it does in the sentence already. The best answer choice, therefore, is "in fornt of the rest of the students in the class."
Example Question #222 : Correcting Phrase, Clause, And Sentence Errors
Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.
To make the groups all undertake to get equal funding, the accountant had to perform careful calculations and negotiations.
To make groups undertake equal funding
So the groups all undertake to get equal funding
So that the groups would all seek equal funding
To make the groups all undertake equal funding
To make the groups all undertake to get equal funding
So that the groups would all seek equal funding
The underlined portion of the sentence is overly wordy and confusing, with a passive construction and two verbs, "make" and "undertake," being at odds with each other. This phrase needs to be greatly simplified to be improved. "So that the groups would all seek equal funding," is the best choice among the answers.
Example Question #202 : Correcting Other Phrase, Clause, And Sentence Errors
Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.
Politicians and their aides are so often stuck in their own bubble not aware of the concerns of their constituents.
unaware their constituents' concerns.
that they are unaware of their constituents concerns.
unaware of the concerns of there constituents.
that they are unaware of their constituents' concerns.
not aware of the concerns of their constituents.
that they are unaware of their constituents' concerns.
The underlined portion of the sentence is both awkwardly worded and is oddly connected to the rest of the sentence. The phrase can be improved by simplifying the word order and connecting it more definitely to the rest of the sentence; therefore, the correct answer choice is "that they are unaware of their constituents' concerns."
Example Question #192 : Correcting Other Phrase, Clause, And Sentence Errors
Choose the best way to rephrase the underlined portion of the sentence. One of the answer choices repeats the original phrasing.
Many food products that are marketed as “natural” or “healthy,” which lures in health-conscious consumers, but these claims are meaningless because they do not reflect any standardized guidelines.
“healthy” lure in
“healthy,” and these claims lure in
“healthy,” and these claims are luring in
“healthy,” luring in
“healthy,” which lures in
“healthy” lure in
The best answer is the most concise and straightforward phrasing.
Example Question #1431 : Improving Sentences
Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English.
Had been immersed in the literature since childhood, he maintained an appreciation for it as an adult.
Had been immersed
Immersion having happened
Immersion happening
He who had been immersed
Having been immersed
Having been immersed
The sentence's introductory clause seems to intend to describe the subject "he," but it begins with a verb that doesn't clearly connect to the rest of the sentence and is grammatically incorrect. Introductory clauses can begin with participles, which would make much more sense in this sentence by allowing the start of the sentence to connect clearly to the subject. Of the potential answer choices, only "Having been immersed" omits the incorrect verb and replaces it with a grammatically correct participle. The other answer choices don't make sense: "Immersion having happened" and "Immersion happening" don't clearly connect the first phrase to the subject, and "He who had been immersed" introduces a grammatical error by making the sentence contain two disconnected subjects, "He who had been immersed in the literature since childhood" and "he." The corrected sentence reads, "Having been immersed in the literature since childhood, he maintained an appreciation for it as an adult."
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