SAT Writing : Rewriting a Sentence Fragment
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Example Question #3103 : Sat Writing
1 Ethnography: sounds erogenous but is simply a study of a culture or group of people.2 Originating in the field of anthropology, later becoming popular in sociology and other disciplines. 3 Ethnographies typically include: descriptions of geography, religion, economy, social behaviors, rituals and histories. 4 Most early ethnographies were written by ex-patriot European explorers traveling outside their home continent; though by some standards the Greek historian Herodotus was producing protoplasmic ethnographies hundreds of years before the Age of Exploration. 5 Ethnographies can take forms ranging from the confessional, the feminist, the critical, and the realist but most are qualitative and descriptive rather than quantitative and statistical. 6 Some attempt to provide fairly objective observations of a group or society, others have the anterior motive of empowering marginalized or repressed cultures.7 This group or culture may include anything from a fraternity to a particular Uruguayan village. 8 Today ethnographers often immerse themselves fully in the lives of their subjects, be they powerful politicians and impoverished blue-collar workers.
How should the underlined portion of Sentence 8 be rewritten?
ethnographers often, immerse themselves fully
ethnographers often immerse him- and herselves fully
ethnographers often immerse themselves fully (no change)
ethnographers often immerses themselves fully
ethnographers, often immersed fully
ethnographers often immerse themselves fully (no change)
No rewriting is necessary for this phrase. The plural pronoun matches the plural noun and the verb conjugation is correct.
Example Question #3104 : Sat Writing
1 Dream interpretation has a long and storied past. 2 Did you know that the ancient Egyptians were interpreting dreams thousands of years ago? 3 In ancient Greece, prophecies were often based off dreams; and in English literature including Shakespeare dreams have long held a significant role.
4 Common dream symbols include new rooms, which indicate new discoveries about the self, hair, which is purportedly related to sexuality, and forests, which alternately signal loss or variegated opportunities. 5 Books with titles ranging from The Lofty Principles of Dream Interpretation and Dream Alchemy offer advice, and opinions.6 More recently, psychologists have contributed their own analysis to the collaboration of interpretative literature. 7 What did you think your dreams mean?
How should the underlined portion of Sentence 3 be rewritten?
and in English literature, including Shakespearean dreams, they have long held a significant role.
and in English literature including Shakespeare plays, dreams have long held a significant role.
and in English literature (including Shakespeare’s plays) dreams have long held a significant role.
and in English literature (including Shakespeare) dreams, have long held a significant role.
and in English literature including Shakespeare dreams have long held a significant role. (no change)
and in English literature (including Shakespeare’s plays) dreams have long held a significant role.
There are two issues with this part of the sentence: Shakespeare is not a work of English literature (he’s an author), and parenthetical punctuation has been mistakenly left out.
Example Question #3105 : Sat Writing
1 Dream interpretation has a long and storied past. 2 Did you know that the ancient Egyptians were interpreting dreams thousands of years ago? 3 In ancient Greece, prophecies were often based off dreams; and in English literature including Shakespeare dreams have long held a significant role.
4 Common dream symbols include new rooms, which indicate new discoveries about the self, hair, which is purportedly related to sexuality, and forests, which alternately signal loss or variegated opportunities. 5 Books with titles ranging from The Lofty Principles of Dream Interpretation and Dream Alchemy offer advice, and opinions.6 More recently, psychologists have contributed their own analysis to the collaboration of interpretative literature. 7 What did you think your dreams mean?
How should the underlined portion of Sentence 3 be rewritten?
In ancient Greece, prophecies were often based off dreams; (no change)
In ancient Greece; prophecies were often based off dreams,
In ancient Greece, prophecies were often based off dreams,
In ancient Greece – prophecies were often based off dreams –
In ancient Greece: prophecies were often based off dreams,
In ancient Greece, prophecies were often based off dreams,
Although the original sentence correctly uses a comma to separate the dependent clause (“In ancient Greece”) from the independent clause (“prophecies were often based off dreams”), it incorrectly uses a semicolon instead of a comma before the subsequent conjunction and independent clause.
Example Question #3106 : Sat Writing
1 Dream interpretation has a long and storied past. 2 Did you know that the ancient Egyptians were interpreting dreams thousands of years ago? 3 In ancient Greece, prophecies were often based off dreams; and in English literature including Shakespeare dreams have long held a significant role.
4 Common dream symbols include new rooms, which indicate new discoveries about the self, hair, which is purportedly related to sexuality, and forests, which alternately signal loss or variegated opportunities. 5 Books with titles ranging from The Lofty Principles of Dream Interpretation and Dream Alchemy offer advice, and opinions. 6 More recently, psychologists have contributed their own analysis to the collaboration of interpretative literature. 7 What did you think your dreams mean?
How should the underlined portion of Sentence 5 be rewritten?
offers advice and opinions
offer advice and opinions
offering advice, and opinions
offer advice, and opinions (no change)
offers advice, and opinions
offer advice and opinions
Commas are generally only required before conjunctions if the items being joined by the conjunction are both independent clauses. This is not the case here, so no comma is necessary. The verb is correctly conjugated to reflect the plural subject.
Example Question #3107 : Sat Writing
1 The job of the cryptozoologist is a taciturn one for sure. 2 Being unlike ordinary zoologists, that study the behaviors and lives of a cathartic variety of animals, cryptozoologists track down mythical animals whose existence has never or rarely been proven.
3 There is the Congolese J'ba FoFi, an enormous spider with legs allegedly over three feet long, the mokèlé-mbèmbé, a deadly African water dinosaur, and the phantom cat, an abnormally large feline found in various improbably places. 4 The origins of the word “cryptozoologist” come from the ancient Greek, crypto meaning “hidden” and “zoo” meaning animal. 5 Some of the most famous of these mythical animals or cryptids are Bigfoot, the Loch Ness monster, and Chupacabra. 6 Many denizens consider cryptozoologists to be pseudoscientists; but, they believe that the discipline’s reliance on anecdotal evidence does not exclude it from the world of serious science.
7 Many of these animals seem too incredible to be believed and yes evidence is often flimsy, but the existence of fossil records sometimes provide evidence to the contrary. 8 As such many doubters attempt to machinate the cryptids’ existence, but cryptozoologists aim to abolish their skepticism.
How should the underlined portion of Sentence 5 be rewritten?
Some of the most famous of these mythical animals or cryptids are (no change)
Some of the most famous of these mythical animals, or cryptids, are
Some of the most famous of these mythical animals, or cryptids are
Some of the most famous of these mythical animals or cryptids, are
Some of the most famous of these mythical animals or cryptids, being
Some of the most famous of these mythical animals, or cryptids, are
In this sentence, “or cryptids” functions as a parenthetical clause that modifies “mythical animals,” so it must be enclosed in either commas or parentheses.
Example Question #3108 : Sat Writing
1 The job of the cryptozoologist is a taciturn one for sure. 2 Being unlike ordinary zoologists, that study the behaviors and lives of a cathartic variety of animals, cryptozoologists track down mythical animals whose existence has never or rarely been proven.
3 There is the Congolese J'ba FoFi, an enormous spider with legs allegedly over three feet long, the mokèlé-mbèmbé, a deadly African water dinosaur, and the phantom cat, an abnormally large feline found in various improbably places. 4 The origins of the word “cryptozoologist” come from the ancient Greek, crypto meaning “hidden” and “zoo” meaning animal.5 Some of the most famous of these mythical animals or cryptids are Bigfoot, the Loch Ness monster, and Chupacabra. 6 Many denizens consider cryptozoologists to be pseudoscientists; but, they believe that the discipline’s reliance on anecdotal evidence does not exclude it from the world of serious science.
7 Many of these animals seem too incredible to be believed and yes evidence is often flimsy, but the existence of fossil records sometimes provide evidence to the contrary. 8 As such many doubters attempt to machinate the cryptids’ existence, but cryptozoologists aim to abolish their skepticism.
How should the underlined portion of Sentence 7 be rewritten?
Many of these animals seem too incredible to be believed and yes evidence is often flimsy, (no change)
Many of these animals seem too incredible to be believed and, yes, evidence is often flimsy,
Many of these animals seem too incredible to be believed, and yes evidence is often flimsy,
Many of these animals seem too incredible to be believed and yes, evidence is often flimsy,
Many of these animals seem too incredible to be believed, and, yes, evidence is often flimsy,
Many of these animals seem too incredible to be believed, and, yes, evidence is often flimsy,
The original sentence lacks necessary commas – one of either side of the parenthetical “yes” and one in front of the conjunction (“and”) that joins two independent clauses.
Example Question #3109 : Sat Writing
1 The job of the cryptozoologist is a taciturn one for sure. 2 Being unlike ordinary zoologists, that study the behaviors and lives of a cathartic variety of animals, cryptozoologists track down mythical animals whose existence has never or rarely been proven.
3 There is the Congolese J'ba FoFi, an enormous spider with legs allegedly over three feet long, the mokèlé-mbèmbé, a deadly African water dinosaur, and the phantom cat, an abnormally large feline found in various improbably places. 4 The origins of the word “cryptozoologist” come from the ancient Greek, crypto meaning “hidden” and “zoo” meaning animal. 5 Some of the most famous of these mythical animals or cryptids are Bigfoot, the Loch Ness monster, and Chupacabra. 6 Many denizens consider cryptozoologists to be pseudoscientists; but, they believe that the discipline’s reliance on anecdotal evidence does not exclude it from the world of serious science.
7 Many of these animals seem too incredible to be believed and yes evidence is often flimsy, but the existence of fossil records sometimes provide evidence to the contrary. 8 As such many doubters attempt to machinate the cryptids’ existence, but cryptozoologists aim to abolish their skepticism.
How should the underlined portion of Sentence 4 be rewritten?
Greek: crypto meaning hidden and zoo meaning animal.
Greek, crypto meaning hidden, and zoo meaning animal.
Greek, “crypto” meaning “hidden” and “zoo” meaning “animal.”
Greek: “crypto,” meaning “hidden,” and “zoo,” meaning “animal.”
Greek, crypto meaning “hidden” and “zoo” meaning animal. (no change)
Greek: “crypto,” meaning “hidden,” and “zoo,” meaning “animal.”
Here, we need to fix the inconsistent quotation marks and use commas to denote the sentence’s parenthetical elements.
Example Question #3110 : Sat Writing
1 Ethnography: sounds erogenous but is simply a study of a culture or group of people.2 Originating in the field of anthropology, later becoming popular in sociology and other disciplines. 3 Ethnographies typically include: descriptions of geography, religion, economy, social behaviors, rituals and histories. 4 Most early ethnographies were written by ex-patriot European explorers traveling outside their home continent; though by some standards the Greek historian Herodotus was producing protoplasmic ethnographies hundreds of years before the Age of Exploration. 5 Ethnographies can take forms ranging from the confessional, the feminist, the critical, and the realist but most are qualitative and descriptive rather than quantitative and statistical. 6 Some attempt to provide fairly objective observations of a group or society, others have the anterior motive of empowering marginalized or repressed cultures.7 This group or culture may include anything from a fraternity to a particular Uruguayan village. 8 Today ethnographers often immerse themselves fully in the lives of their subjects, be they powerful politicians and impoverished blue-collar workers.
How should the underlined portion of Sentence 4 be rewritten?
outside their home continent, however, by some standards
outside their home continent, though by some standards
outside their home continent; although, by some standards
outside their home continent though by some standards
outside their home continent; though by some standards (no change)
outside their home continent, though by some standards
Here, we have an independent clause (“Most early ethnographies were written by ex-patriot European explorers traveling outside their home continent”) followed by a dependent clause (“though by some standards the Greek historian Herodotus was producing protoplasmic ethnographies hundreds of years before the Age of Exploration”). A semicolon is incorrect punctuation for this type of sentence; a comma should be used instead.
Example Question #3111 : Sat Writing
1 The job of the cryptozoologist is a taciturn one for sure. 2 Being unlike ordinary zoologists, that study the behaviors and lives of a cathartic variety of animals, cryptozoologists track down mythical animals whose existence has never or rarely been proven.
3 There is the Congolese J'ba FoFi, an enormous spider with legs allegedly over three feet long, the mokèlé-mbèmbé, a deadly African water dinosaur, and the phantom cat, an abnormally large feline found in various improbably places. 4 The origins of the word “cryptozoologist” come from the ancient Greek, crypto meaning “hidden” and “zoo” meaning animal.5 Some of the most famous of these mythical animals or cryptids are Bigfoot, the Loch Ness monster, and Chupacabra. 6 Many denizens consider cryptozoologists to be pseudoscientists; but, they believe that the discipline’s reliance on anecdotal evidence does not exclude it from the world of serious science.
7 Many of these animals seem too incredible to be believed and yes evidence is often flimsy, but the existence of fossil records sometimes provide evidence to the contrary. 8 As such many doubters attempt to machinate the cryptids’ existence, but cryptozoologists aim to abolish their skepticism.
How should the underlined portion of Sentence 7 be rewritten?
sometimes provide evidence to the contrary
sometimes provides evidence on the contrary
sometimes, has provided evidence to the contrary
sometimes provides evidence to the contrary
sometimes, providing evidence on the contrary
sometimes provides evidence to the contrary
The subject in this part of the sentence is the singular “existence,” not the plural “fossil records,” so the verb must be conjugated accordingly. “To the contrary” is the correct expression.
Example Question #3112 : Sat Writing
1 Ethnography: sounds erogenous but is simply a study of a culture or group of people.2 Originating in the field of anthropology, later becoming popular in sociology and other disciplines. 3 Ethnographies typically include: descriptions of geography, religion, economy, social behaviors, rituals and histories. 4 Most early ethnographies were written by ex-patriot European explorers traveling outside their home continent; though by some standards the Greek historian Herodotus was producing protoplasmic ethnographies hundreds of years before the Age of Exploration. 5 Ethnographies can take forms ranging from the confessional, the feminist, the critical, and the realist but most are qualitative and descriptive rather than quantitative and statistical. 6 Some attempt to provide fairly objective observations of a group or society, others have the anterior motive of empowering marginalized or repressed cultures.7 This group or culture may include anything from a fraternity to a particular Uruguayan village. 8 Today ethnographers often immerse themselves fully in the lives of their subjects, be they powerful politicians and impoverished blue-collar workers.
How should the underlined portion of Sentence 8 be rewritten?
be they powerful politicians with impoverished blue-collar workers.
be they powerful politicians or impoverished blue-collar workers.
be they powerful politicians to impoverished blue-collar workers.
be they powerful politicians and be they impoverished blue-collar workers.
be they powerful politicians and impoverished blue-collar workers. (no change)
be they powerful politicians or impoverished blue-collar workers.
The correct construction is always “be they __________ or __________.”
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