PSAT Writing : Improving Sentences

Study concepts, example questions & explanations for PSAT Writing

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Example Questions

Example Question #2001 : Correcting Grammatical Errors

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English.

Does one have a responsibility to help others, or do you only have a responsibility to help yourself?

Possible Answers:

Does one have a responsibility to help others, or does one only have a responsibility to help themselves?

Does one have a responsibility to the helping of the others, or does one only have a responsibility to the helping of yourself?

Do ones have a responsibility to help others, or do ones only have a responsibility to help his or herself?

Do you have a responsibility to help others, or do you only have a responsibility to help yourself?

Does one have a responsibility to help others, or do you only have a responsibility to help yourself?

Correct answer:

Do you have a responsibility to help others, or do you only have a responsibility to help yourself?

Explanation:

In the sentence as it is written, "one" and "you" are both used. You should stick to using one of these pronouns or the other, and not switch between them in a sentence.

Example Question #1 : Correcting Pronoun Errors: Inconsistent Usage

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices repeats the underlined portion as it is written.

When you go to a buffet, one should make sure that you do not overeat.

Possible Answers:

then make sure

be sure of

and make sure

one should make sure

make sure

Correct answer:

make sure

Explanation:

The sentence begins by using the pronoun "you," but then switches to using the pronoun "one." These should be kept consistent.

Example Question #1 : Correcting Pronoun Errors: Inconsistent Usage

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

Though one must respect the opinions of others, you do not have to change your values to become part of the crowd.

Possible Answers:

you do not have to change one's values to become part of the crowd.

one does not have to change one's values to become part of the crowd. 

 you do not have to change your values to become part of the crowd.

one does not have to change their values to become part of the crowd.

one does not have to change your values to become part of the crowd.

Correct answer:

one does not have to change one's values to become part of the crowd. 

Explanation:

Since the third person pronoun "one" was used to describe the subject in the beginning, the subject must be referred to as "one" throughout the sentence. The correct answer is "one does not have to change one's values and become part of the crowd." 

Example Question #71 : Correcting Usage Errors

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English.

The real estate lawyer could not recall with who he had his next meeting.

Possible Answers:

whom he had his next meeting with

with whom he had had his next meeting

with whom he had his next meeting

who he had his next meeting with

with who he had his next meeting

Correct answer:

with whom he had his next meeting

Explanation:

“Who” must be changed to “whom” because it is the object of the preposition “with.” Also, it is not desirable to end a sentence with a preposition.

Example Question #1 : Correcting Pronoun Errors: Case

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English.

Many facts about astronomy have fascinated my brother and I ever since we were in elementary school.

Possible Answers:

has fascinated my brother and me ever since we were in elementary school

fascinate my brother and I ever since we were in elementary school

have fascinated my brother and me ever since we were in elementary school

have fascinated my brother and I ever since we were in elementary school

has fascinated my brother and I ever since we were in elementary school

Correct answer:

have fascinated my brother and me ever since we were in elementary school

Explanation:

The original text contains a pronoun case error. It says "my brother and I" when it should say "my brother and me." Remember to use objective pronouns—like "me," "him," and "us"—as the objects of verbs (in this case, the verb "fascinated").

Although answer choice "has fascinated my brother and me ever since we were in elementary school" correctly uses "me" instead of "I," it incorrectly uses the singular predicate "has fascinated" with the plural subject "facts."

Example Question #1 : Correcting Pronoun Errors: Case

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

Between you and I, we could not send you to that private high school because the tuition was so expensive.

Possible Answers:

Between you and I, we cannot send you to that private high school because the tuition was so expensive. 

Between you and I, we could not send you to that private high school because the tuition was so expensive.

Between you and I, we could not send you to that private high school for the tuition was so expensive. 

Between you and I, we couldn’t send you to that private high school because the tuition was so expensive. 

Between you and me, we could not send you to that private high school because the tuition was so expensive. 

Correct answer:

Between you and me, we could not send you to that private high school because the tuition was so expensive. 

Explanation:

After the preposition "between," one uses the objects pronouns "you" and "me."

Example Question #71 : Correcting Pronoun Errors

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

Me and the general always took a stroll in the morning.

Possible Answers:

The general, I

Me and the general

The general and I

The general and me

I and the general

Correct answer:

The general and I

Explanation:

The underlined portion is an incorrect usage of "me." A good rule of thumb, and the best way to find the answer, is to see which pronoun is appropriate alone, "me" or "I." "The general and I" is the correct answer.

Example Question #71 : Correcting Usage Errors

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

She and him do not dance under any circumstances.

Possible Answers:

She and he do not

They does not

They do not

She and him does not

She and him do not

Correct answer:

They do not

Explanation:

Using "she and him" is always incorrect, as "she" is a subject and "him" is an object. The best way to fix this is to use "they" and its correct verb usage, "do not."

Example Question #72 : Correcting Word Usage Errors

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

The archdeacon did not adopt Rigoberto out of pure pity or the goodness of his heart; rather, the archdeacon wanted to ensure that him and his brother Juan would be allowed entrance into heaven.

Possible Answers:

her

he

one

they

him

Correct answer:

he

Explanation:

In the phrase "...to ensure that that him and his brother Juan would be allowed...", "him and his brother" are carrying out the action implied in "would be allowed". For this reason, the subject "he" is required, not the object "him".

Example Question #1 : Correcting Verb Errors

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English.

Early this morning, a purple bicycle was discovered by the old oak tree

Possible Answers:

a purple bicycle by the old oak tree was discovered

someone found a purple bicycle near the old oak tree

the old oak tree discovered a purple bicycle

a purple bicycle was discovered near the old oak tree

a purple bicycle was discovered by the old oak tree

Correct answer:

someone found a purple bicycle near the old oak tree

Explanation:

The active voice, which requires an agent (a “doer”), is preferred to the passive voice on the SAT exam. Also, the sentence presents a logical problem, as it does not clearly indicate whether the old oak tree discovered the bicycle or someone or something else did.

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