SAT Writing : Improving Sentences

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Example Questions

Example Question #351 : Correcting Punctuation Errors

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

This situation is very odd, I have to admit that it is also highly entertaining.

Possible Answers:

This situation is very odd but I have to admit that it is also highly entertaining.

This situation is very odd, but I have to admit that it is also highly entertaining.

This situation is very odd, I have to admit that it is also highly entertaining.

This situation is very odd I have to admit that it is also highly entertaining.

This situation is very odd; but I have to admit that it is also highly entertaining.

Correct answer:

This situation is very odd, but I have to admit that it is also highly entertaining.

Explanation:

The example sentence makes a comma splice error, since both clauses are independent and they are joined only by a comma. Comma splice errors can be fixed by making the clauses into their own sentences, or joining them into a compound sentence with either a semicolon or a comma and an appropriate coordinating conjunction. All three options are equally grammatically correct, whichever you choose depends on your own personal writing style.

Example Question #1602 : Improving Sentences

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

I'm really enjoying the pizza, there isn't quite enough for me so I may order another.

Possible Answers:

I'm really enjoying the pizza, there isn't quite enough for me so I may order another.

I'm really enjoying the pizza; but there isn't quite enough for me so I may order another.

I'm really enjoying the pizza there isn't quite enough for me so I may order another.

I'm really enjoying the pizza: but there isn't quite enough for me so I may order another.

I'm really enjoying the pizza, but there isn't quite enough for me so I may order another.

Correct answer:

I'm really enjoying the pizza, but there isn't quite enough for me so I may order another.

Explanation:

A comma splice error occurs when two independent clauses are joined by only a single comma. One option is to simply make the two independent clauses into separate sentences. If you wish to join two independent clauses into a compound sentence, you may either use a comma followed by an appropriate coordinating conjunction or you may use a semicolon with no accompanying conjunction. In the sentence above, the second independent clause makes a contradictory statement, so adding the coordinating conjunction "but" is the best way to fix the splice.

Example Question #1603 : Improving Sentences

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

My friend Paul is an excellent driver, his brother Joseph is a superior one.

Possible Answers:

My friend Paul is an excellent driver; and his brother Joseph is a superior one.

My friend Paul is an excellent driver his brother Joseph is a superior one.

My friend Paul is an excellent driver; but his brother Joseph is a superior one.

My friend Paul is an excellent driver, but his brother Joseph is a superior one.

My friend Paul is an excellent driver, his brother Joseph is a superior one.

Correct answer:

My friend Paul is an excellent driver, but his brother Joseph is a superior one.

Explanation:

A comma splice error occurs when two independent clauses are joined by only a single comma. One option is to make the two independent clauses their own sentences. The other is to join them into one compound sentence, if you choose to go that route, you can either join the clauses with a semicolon instead of a comma, or a comma followed by an appropriate coordinating conjunction. In this case, since a contrast is being indicated, the coordinating conjunction "but" is the best choice.

Example Question #3771 : Sat Writing

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

My father is an excellent attorney, he has represented a broad array of clients.

Possible Answers:

My father is an excellent attorney he has represented a broad array of clients.

My father is an excellent attorney, he has represented a broad array of clients.

My father is an excellent attorney; he has represented a broad array of clients.

My father is an excellent attorney; while he has represented a broad array of clients.

My father is an excellent attorney; and he has represented a broad array of clients.

Correct answer:

My father is an excellent attorney; he has represented a broad array of clients.

Explanation:

In the example sentence, both "my father is an excellent attorney" and "he has represented a broad array of clients" are both acting as independent (main) clauses, and thus joining them with only a comma is incorrect. This species of error is called a comma splice. If you wish to join two independent clauses into one compound sentence, you can either use a semicolon, or a comma and a coordinating conjunction. The only correct answer option uses a semicolon.

Note also, that semicolons, when used in this manner, cannot be followed by a coordinating conjunction.

Example Question #1605 : Improving Sentences

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

There's a grocery store across the street from me, I frequent it almost every day.

Possible Answers:

There's a grocery store across the street from me, I frequent it almost every day.

There's a grocery store across the street from me but I frequent it almost every day.

There's a grocery store across the street from me, and I frequent it almost every day.

There's a grocery store across the street from me I frequent it almost every day.

There's a grocery store across the street from me; and I frequent it almost every day.

Correct answer:

There's a grocery store across the street from me, and I frequent it almost every day.

Explanation:

When two independent clauses are joined only by a single comma, this results in an error known as a "comma splice." In the example above, something more than a comma is needed to separate the two clauses, and the only correct answer option provided adds the coordinating conjunction "and" after the comma.

Example Question #6 : Commas

Are you trying to stick to a budget? Using coupons for purchases, also known as “couponing” is a great way to save money on groceries. Coupons are a little piece of paper that can give you a discount on what you buy. You will be amazed at the great bargains and amazing savings you can get!

It’s easy to get started. When you open up your daily newspaper, one might find a glossy insert full of coupons. Some of the coupons will be for things you don’t buy, some will be for things you buy all the time. Go through the coupons and chop out the ones you can use.

The key to successful couponing is getting multiple copies of coupon circulars. Ask your friends, your neighbors, and family if they have any extras. Some coupon users even go through the recycling at their office to find more coupons! Have you ever heard of such a thing in your life! Completely devoted, these circulars help coupon users to get even more savings.

Couponing might sound like hard work, but for many people, it’s also a hobby. Not only does it help them save hundreds of dollars per year, but also it gives them a fun challenge every time they do their shopping. 

How should the underlined section be corrected?

Possible Answers:

Some of the coupons will be for things you don’t buy, but some will be for things you buy all the time.

Some of the coupons will be for things you don’t buy and some will be for things you buy all the time.

Some of the coupons will be for things you don’t buy but some will be for things you buy all the time.

NO CHANGE

Some of the coupons will be for things you don’t buy some will be for things you buy all the time.

Correct answer:

Some of the coupons will be for things you don’t buy, but some will be for things you buy all the time.

Explanation:

This question asks you to correct a comma splice error. A comma splice occurs when two complete sentences are joined with just a comma. We have two options to correct a comma splice. We can either replace the comma with a period to create two complete sentences, or we can use a comma and a conjunction. In this context, the second sentence provides a contrast to the first sentence, so it is appropriate to use a comma and the conjunction “but.” Eliminating the comma creates a run-on sentence even if the conjunction "but" is added. The use of the conjunction "and" is grammatically correct, but it is not as strong a choice since it does not communicate the contrast between the two sentences. 

Example Question #1601 : Improving Sentences

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

Angles, Jutes, and Saxons, were the dominant tribes that invaded Britain during that era.

Possible Answers:

Angles, Jutes, and Saxons, were

Angles, Jutes, Saxons, were

Angles Jutes Saxons were

Angles, Jutes, and Saxons were

Angles Jutes, and Saxons were

Correct answer:

Angles, Jutes, and Saxons were

Explanation:

The list that forms the subject of the sentence, "Angles, Jutes, and Saxons," appropriately separates its items with commas. The comma between "Saxons" and "were" splits the subject of the sentence from the verb, and should be removed. This makes "Angles, Jutes, and Saxons were" the correct answer choice.

Example Question #2 : Correcting Punctuation Errors: Commas In Lists

Jane Sally and Suzy all went to the zoo together, making the experience one they all three would treasure.

Possible Answers:

Jane, Sally, and Suzy all went to the zoo together

Jane Sally, and Suzy all went to the zoo together

Jane Sally and Suzy all went to the zoo together

Jane Sally and Suzy, all went to the zoo together

Jane, Sally, and Suzy, all went to the zoo together

Correct answer:

Jane, Sally, and Suzy all went to the zoo together

Explanation:

The list of names that forms the subject of the sentence is written incorrectly. All lists need to have commas separating their parts from each other for purposes of clarity. The correct answer choice is "Jane, Sally, and Suzy all went to the zoo together."

Example Question #1 : Correcting Punctuation Errors: Commas In Lists

Tom Dick and Harry have all seen the problems with the newspaper's advertising strategy.

Possible Answers:

Tom Dick and Harry, have all seen

Tom, Dick, and Harry have all seen

Tom Dick and Harry have all saw

Tom, Dick, and Harry, have all seen

Tom Dick and Harry have all seen

Correct answer:

Tom, Dick, and Harry have all seen

Explanation:

The list of names that make up the subjects of the sentence all need to be appropriately punctuated. Any such list needs have all the elements set apart from each other; therefore, "Tom, Dick, and Harry have all seen" is the correct answer.

Example Question #3 : Correcting Punctuation Errors: Commas

Politicians organizers and reformers all came together to bring the initiative to the legislature.

Possible Answers:

Politicians organizers and reformers all came together

Politicians organizers and reformers, all came together

Politicians organizers and reformers all come together

Politicians, organizers, and reformers all came together

Politicians organizers and reformers have all come together

Correct answer:

Politicians, organizers, and reformers all came together

Explanation:

The list that functions as the subject of the sentence needs to have commas separating its elements, distinguishing the different parts. The only answer choice that does this is "Politicians, organizers, and reformers all came together," making it the correct answer choice.

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