SAT Writing : Improving Sentences

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Example Questions

Example Question #662 : Act English

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English.

Many artifacts produced during the Neolithic Era were made of carved rocks, it is for this reason that the period is commonly referred to as the Stone Age.

Possible Answers:

rocks; and for this reason, the period

rocks, which for this reason, the period

rocks, for this reason the period

rocks, it is for this reason that the period

rocks; for this reason, the period

Correct answer:

rocks; for this reason, the period

Explanation:

The answer choice "rocks; for this reason, the period" contains an appropriate use of a semicolon and is correct.

The original text "rocks, it is for this reason that the period" and the answer choice "rocks, for this reason the period" each create a run-on sentence, so neither of these answers is correct.

The answer choice "rocks, which for this reason, the period" contains a misplaced relative clause and is therefore incorrect.

The answer choice "rocks; and for this reason, the period" contains an incorrect use of a semicolon. Sentences can be joined by either a comma followed by a conjunction or by a semicolon, but not by a semicolon followed by a conjunction.

 

Example Question #292 : Punctuation Errors

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English.

The teacher was a stickler for order, she did not tolerate anyone acting up in her classroom.

Possible Answers:

The teacher was a stickler for order, she did not tolerate anyone acting up in her classroom.

The teacher was a stickler for order, she does not tolerate anyone acting up in her classroom.

The teacher, was a stickler for order, she did not tolerate anyone acting up in her classroom.

The teacher was a stickler for order; she did not tolerate anyone acting up in her classroom.

The teacher was a stickler for order, she did not tolerate anyone acting up in her classroom?

Correct answer:

The teacher was a stickler for order; she did not tolerate anyone acting up in her classroom.

Explanation:

The part of the sentence that precedes the comma and the part of the sentence that comes after the comma are each independent clauses; they could stand as complete sentences by themselves. It is not grammatically correct to join two independent clauses together into a compound sentence by using just a comma; this is a grammatical error known as a "comma splice." Compound sentences may be formed using either a semicolon by itself or a comma followed by a conjunction. The only answer choice that correctly uses one of these methods to fix the sentence's comma splice is "The teacher was a stickler for order; she did not tolerate anyone acting up in her classroom."

Example Question #1541 : Improving Sentences

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

Television has been a controversial medium since its inception, critics were bemoaning its cultural status as early as the 1940s.

Possible Answers:

Television has been a controversial medium since its inception so critics were bemoaning its cultural status as early as the 1940s.

Television has been a controversial medium since its inception; critics were bemoaning its cultural status as early as the 1940s.

Television has been a controversial medium since its inception critics were bemoaning its cultural status as early as the 1940s.

Television has been a controversial medium since its inception and so critics were bemoaning its cultural status as early as the 1940s.

Television has been a controversial medium since its inception, critics were bemoaning its cultural status as early as the 1940s.

Correct answer:

Television has been a controversial medium since its inception; critics were bemoaning its cultural status as early as the 1940s.

Explanation:

The sentence is written as a compound sentence, joining two independent phrases into one sentence to show their relationship. All compound sentences, though, need to be joined either by a semicolon or a comma followed by a conjunction. The only answer choice which employs either of these options is "Television has been a controversial medium since its inception; critics were bemoaning its cultural status as early as the 1940s."

Example Question #1542 : Improving Sentences

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices repeats the underlined portion as it is written.

Young musicians often struggle with keeping the proper tempo in an ensemble, remedying this problem is one of the things that signals a musician's growing maturity.

Possible Answers:

Young musicians often struggle with keeping the proper tempo in an ensemble; remedying this problem is one of the things that signals a musician's growing maturity.

Young musicians often struggle with keeping the proper tempo in an ensemble and remedying this problem is one of the things that signals a musician's growing maturity.

Young musicians often struggle with keeping the proper tempo in an ensemble remedying this problem is one of the things that signals a musician's growing maturity.

Young musicians often struggle with keeping the proper tempo in an ensemble so remedying this problem is one of the things that signals a musician's growing maturity.

Young musicians often struggle with keeping the proper tempo in an ensemble, remedying this problem is one of the things that signals a musician's growing maturity.

Correct answer:

Young musicians often struggle with keeping the proper tempo in an ensemble; remedying this problem is one of the things that signals a musician's growing maturity.

Explanation:

The sentence as it is written is a compound sentence, or two complete thoughts joined together to show their relationship. All compound sentences have to be joined by either a semicolon or a comma and a conjunction. The only answer choice that does this is "Young musicians often struggle with keeping the proper tempo in an ensemble; remedying this problem is one of the things that signals a musician's growing maturity."

Example Question #33 : Correcting Punctuation Errors: Comma Splices

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

In baseball, the batter must hit the ball within a ninety degree field, in cricket the batter can hit the ball anywhere.

Possible Answers:

field; but in cricket the batter can hit

field, but in cricket the batter can hit

field, but the batter can hit in cricket

field, in cricket the batter can hit

field; the batter in cricket hitting

Correct answer:

field, but in cricket the batter can hit

Explanation:

The original sentence has a comma splice. Because the two clauses contrast each other, the conjunction but is most appropriate. One choice using but is wrong because the conjunction cannot be used with a semicolon. Another choice using but is wrong because the phrase "in cricket" is misplaced.

Example Question #294 : Correcting Punctuation Errors

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

The politicians grew more and more nervous about the legislation passing with each day, former supporters were switching sides with regularity.

Possible Answers:

The politicians grew more and more nervous about the legislation passing with each day; former supporters were switching sides with regularity.

The politicians grew more and more nervous about the legislation passing with each day so former supporters were switching sides with regularity.

The politicians grew more and more nervous about the legislation passing with each day former supporters were switching sides with regularity.

The politicians grew more and more nervous about the legislation passing with each day, former supporters were switching sides with regularity.

The politicians grew more and more nervous about the legislation passing with each day as former supporters were switching sides with regularity.

Correct answer:

The politicians grew more and more nervous about the legislation passing with each day; former supporters were switching sides with regularity.

Explanation:

The sentence written above is a compound sentence, a sentence formed by two complete thoughts that are joined to show their relationship. The appropriate ways to join complete sentences is either with a semi-colon or a comma and a conjunction. The only answer choice that does this is "The politicians grew more and more nervous about the legislation passing with each day; former supporters were switching sides with regularity."

Example Question #1543 : Improving Sentences

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

Everyone was aware of the man's financial troubles, few knew just how deep in debt he truly was.

Possible Answers:

Everyone was aware of the man's financial troubles so few knew just how deep in debt he truly was.

Everyone was aware of the man's financial troubles and few knew just how deep in debt he truly was.

Everyone was aware of the man's financial troubles, but few knew just how deep in debt he truly was.

Everyone was aware of the man's financial troubles that few knew just how deep in debt he truly was.

Everyone was aware of the man's financial troubles few knew just how deep in debt he truly was.

Correct answer:

Everyone was aware of the man's financial troubles, but few knew just how deep in debt he truly was.

Explanation:

The sentence is a compound sentence, two complete thoughts that are joined in one sentence. All compound sentences need to have their two parts joined by either a semicolon or a comma and a conjunction; therefore, the correct answer is "Everyone was aware of the man's financial troubles, few knew just how deep in debt he truly was."

Example Question #671 : Act English

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

Many of the participants in the debate were completely unaware of the issues, they looked embarassed when they were asked questions about topics they had not reviewed.

Possible Answers:

issues they

issues which they

issues; they

issues, they

issues until they

Correct answer:

issues; they

Explanation:

The sentence as it is written contains a comma splice, an error in which a comma is incorrectly used to combine two independent clauses. To fix the issue, one need only replace the offending comma with either a semicolon or a comma followed by a conjunction. The only answer choice that employs one of these options is "Many of the participants in the debate were completely unaware of the issues; they looked embarassed when they were asked questions about topics they had not reviewed."

Example Question #1544 : Improving Sentences

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

One of Robert's role models is his father, a fireman, local hero, and small business owner, he started a popular clothing retail store. 

Possible Answers:

owner having started

owner, having started

owner who started 

owner, he started 

owner, starting

Correct answer:

owner who started 

Explanation:

Grammatically, it is best to avoid use of verbs ending in "-ing" where they are not necessary. The correct answer avoids this by using the phrase "owner who started." It is also the most efficient (and least wordy) option. 

Example Question #1545 : Improving Sentences

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

I went to the parking lot to find my car and ran into Matt, he was happy to see me.

Possible Answers:

I went to the parking lot to find my car and ran into Matt. He was happy to see me. 

I went to the parking lot to find my car and ran into Matt, he was happy to see me.

I went to the parking lot to find my car and ran into Matt he was happy to see me.

I went to the parking lot to find my car and ran into Matt but he was happy to see me.

I went to the parking lot to find my car and ran into Matt who was happy to see me.

Correct answer:

I went to the parking lot to find my car and ran into Matt. He was happy to see me. 

Explanation:

The original sentence is a good example of a run-on sentence. Here, two independent clauses are incorrectly joined together with a comma. This is a type of error known as a "comma splice." Two independent clauses can be combined into a compound sentence using a semicolon or a comma followed by a conjunction. Alternatively, we can also make the last part of the sentence about Matt its own sentence, as it is an independent clause.

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