SAT Writing : Improving Paragraphs

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Example Question #251 : Improving Paragraphs

1 All in all, aviation will likely continue to fascinate people for centuries to come. 2 Long before the famous Wright brothers humans were attempting to fly. 3 The ancient Greek myth of Icarus and Daedalus shows the tantalizing allusion of flight. 4 With large kites’ in China may have been the first successful instance of human flight several thousand years ago. 5 Hundreds of years later and despite many hazings; the Montgolfier brothers and other pioneering aviators began experimenting with manned hot-air balloon flights. 6 Therefore, technology has advanced to the point of supersonic and hypersonic flight, but people are still trying to break new barriers and invent new methods of flight.

Where should the following sentence be inserted in the text? “Leonardo da Vinci is one famous Renaissance inventor who built lovely but somewhat ludicrous designs for flying machines; luckily, their construction was never attempted.”

Possible Answers:

After Sentence 4

After Sentence 1

After Sentence 5

After Sentence 3

After Sentence 6

Correct answer:

After Sentence 4

Explanation:

Adhering to the chronological order of this passage would require the sentence to be placed between Sentence 4 and Sentence 5, since the Renaissance occurred after ancient Chinese kite building but before the Montgolfier brothers’ innovations.

Example Question #252 : Improving Paragraphs

1 All in all, aviation will likely continue to fascinate people for centuries to come. 2 Long before the famous Wright brothers humans were attempting to fly. 3 The ancient Greek myth of Icarus and Daedalus shows the tantalizing allusion of flight. 4 With large kites’ in China may have been the first successful instance of human flight several thousand years ago. 5 Hundreds of years later and despite many hazings; the Montgolfier brothers and other pioneering aviators began experimenting with manned hot-air balloon flights. 6 Therefore, technology has advanced to the point of supersonic and hypersonic flight, but people are still trying to break new barriers and invent new methods of flight.

What is the best title for this passage?

Possible Answers:

"Aeronautical Triumphs and Failures"

"Aviation’s Long History of Fascination"

"From Montgolfier to Wright: A Cross-Cultural Triumph"

"History of Airplanes"

"Fatal Attraction: Contemporary Aviation"

Correct answer:

"Aviation’s Long History of Fascination"

Explanation:

The passage is most concerned with providing an overview of humans’ fascination with and attempts at aviation over the centuries, so “Aviation’s Long History of Fascination” is the best fit for the text. The other titles are all honing in on a too-specific element of the passage.

Example Question #253 : Improving Paragraphs

1 All in all, aviation will likely continue to fascinate people for centuries to come. 2 Long before the famous Wright brothers humans were attempting to fly. 3 The ancient Greek myth of Icarus and Daedalus shows the tantalizing allusion of flight. 4 With large kites’ in China may have been the first successful instance of human flight several thousand years ago. 5 Hundreds of years later and despite many hazings; the Montgolfier brothers and other pioneering aviators began experimenting with manned hot-air balloon flights. 6 Therefore, technology has advanced to the point of supersonic and hypersonic flight, but people are still trying to break new barriers and invent new methods of flight.

Which of the following sentences needs an apostrophe added to or deleted from it?

Possible Answers:

Sentence 3

Sentence 2

Sentence 1

Sentence 4

Sentence 5

Correct answer:

Sentence 4

Explanation:

Sentence 4 is incorrectly creating a possessive. The "kites" aren’t possessing anything in this sentence, there are just many of them, so there should be no apostrophe.

Example Question #36 : Inserting Content

1 Visitors to Pennsylvania, Indiana, Ohio, or other United States are often astounded when they encounter an Amish person. 2 To someone who is not familiar with this religious community, the lifestyle seems to harp back to a bygone era. 3 In particular the Amish are known for their plain garments, their eschewal of modern technology, their use of horses and buggies, and their exquisite handicrafts, including: wooden furniture, intricate quilts, and fruit pies. 4 Contact with the outside world is limited, and communities are often as insolent now as when they emigrated from Switzerland in the 1700s.

5 The people are governed strictly in their auspicious behavior, dress, and lifestyle by a set of rules known as Ordnung, and most speak both Pennsylvania Dutch and English. 6 Their religious beliefs are most closely related to Mennonites, and they observe many common Christian practices: baptism, marriage, and Sunday church services, for example. 7 Whereas, the Amish also practice rumspringa, a period of adolescent exploration, as well as excommunication and shunning to exclude those who do not conform to the community’s beliefs and practices. 8 What does life look like inside an Amish community? 9 Wherewithal, there seem to be both positive and negative aspects to this emphasis on family ties, manual labor, and religious belief.

Which sentence needs a comma added to it?

Possible Answers:

Sentence 3

Sentence 5

Sentence 4

Sentence 7

Sentence 6

Correct answer:

Sentence 3

Explanation:

While Sentence 3 already contains a fair number of commas, it needs one more to be grammatically correct. The introductory phrase “In particular” must be set off from the rest of the sentence with a comma.

Example Question #37 : Inserting Content

1 Visitors to Pennsylvania, Indiana, Ohio, or other United States are often astounded when they encounter an Amish person. 2 To someone who is not familiar with this religious community, the lifestyle seems to harp back to a bygone era. 3 In particular the Amish are known for their plain garments, their eschewal of modern technology, their use of horses and buggies, and their exquisite handicrafts, including: wooden furniture, intricate quilts, and fruit pies. 4 Contact with the outside world is limited, and communities are often as insolent now as when they emigrated from Switzerland in the 1700s.

5 The people are governed strictly in their auspicious behavior, dress, and lifestyle by a set of rules known as Ordnung, and most speak both Pennsylvania Dutch and English. 6 Their religious beliefs are most closely related to Mennonites, and they observe many common Christian practices: baptism, marriage, and Sunday church services, for example. 7 Whereas, the Amish also practice rumspringa, a period of adolescent exploration, as well as excommunication and shunning to exclude those who do not conform to the community’s beliefs and practices. 8 What does life look like inside an Amish community? 9 Wherewithal, there seem to be both positive and negative aspects to this emphasis on family ties, manual labor, and religious belief.

Which sentence needs a colon either added to or deleted from it?

Possible Answers:

Sentence 8

Sentence 1

Sentence 2

Sentence 3

Sentence 7

Correct answer:

Sentence 3

Explanation:

As a general rule of thumb, a colon is not needed after the word “including.” (You can think of “including” itself as a sort of colon, a means of introducing a list.) Therefore, the colon in Sentence 3 is incorrect.

Example Question #461 : Sat Writing

1 Visitors to Pennsylvania, Indiana, Ohio, or other United States are often astounded when they encounter an Amish person. 2 To someone who is not familiar with this religious community, the lifestyle seems to harp back to a bygone era. 3 In particular the Amish are known for their plain garments, their eschewal of modern technology, their use of horses and buggies, and their exquisite handicrafts, including: wooden furniture, intricate quilts, and fruit pies. 4 Contact with the outside world is limited, and communities are often as insolent now as when they emigrated from Switzerland in the 1700s.

5 The people are governed strictly in their auspicious behavior, dress, and lifestyle by a set of rules known as Ordnung, and most speak both Pennsylvania Dutch and English. 6 Their religious beliefs are most closely related to Mennonites, and they observe many common Christian practices: baptism, marriage, and Sunday church services, for example. 7 Whereas, the Amish also practice rumspringa, a period of adolescent exploration, as well as excommunication and shunning to exclude those who do not conform to the community’s beliefs and practices. 8 What does life look like inside an Amish community? 9 Wherewithal, there seem to be both positive and negative aspects to this emphasis on family ties, manual labor, and religious belief.

Which sentence needs an apostrophe added to it?

Possible Answers:

none of the sentences in the passage

Sentence 6

Sentence 4

Sentence 8

Sentence 2

Correct answer:

Sentence 6

Explanation:

This is a particularly tricky question, so look at the comparison in Sentence 6. The Amish’s religious beliefs are not closely related to the Mennonite people; their religious beliefs are closely related to the Mennonites’ beliefs. Without making Mennonites possessive, we’re comparing apples to oranges, religious beliefs to people.

Example Question #462 : Sat Writing

1 Dehydration is a potentially serious medical condition that arrives when a patients’ metabolic processes are disrupted by a lack of water in the body. 2 What can cause dehydration? 3 Dehydration can be caused by overexertion, sickness (vomiting or diarrhea), or sun exposure; among other factors. 4 Treatments for dehydration include: drinking small quantities of clear fluid and intravenous hydration. 5 Symptoms of dehydration vary by the severance of water loss, but the most common signs are increased thirst, a swollen tongue, dizziness, weakness, and fainting. 6 If treatment is not sanctioned quickly dehydration can result in delirium, seizures, and even death. 7 Dehydration is most often a problem in the developing world, where insect- and water-borne disease and a lack of accessible medical care causing many preventable infant fatalities.

In Sentence 3, what Latin abbreviation should be added to the parentheses?

Possible Answers:

e.g.

et al

etc.

n.b.

i.e.

Correct answer:

e.g.

Explanation:

The correct abbreviation would be “e.g.” This means “for example,” and it indicates that vomiting and diarrhea are two examples of sickness. The abbreviation “i.e.” means “that is,” “n.b.” means “nota bene” or “pay attention,” “etc.” means “etcetera” or “so on and so on,” and et al means “and others.”

Example Question #254 : Improving Paragraphs

1 Dehydration is a potentially serious medical condition that arrives when a patients’ metabolic processes are disrupted by a lack of water in the body. 2 What can cause dehydration? 3 Dehydration can be caused by overexertion, sickness (vomiting or diarrhea), or sun exposure; among other factors. 4 Treatments for dehydration include: drinking small quantities of clear fluid and intravenous hydration. 5 Symptoms of dehydration vary by the severance of water loss, but the most common signs are increased thirst, a swollen tongue, dizziness, weakness, and fainting. 6 If treatment is not sanctioned quickly dehydration can result in delirium, seizures, and even death. 7 Dehydration is most often a problem in the developing world, where insect- and water-borne disease and a lack of accessible medical care causing many preventable infant fatalities.

Which sentence needs a comma added to it?

Possible Answers:

Sentence 4

Sentence 6

Sentence 2

Sentence 1

Sentence 8

Correct answer:

Sentence 6

Explanation:

Sentence 6 lacks a comma between its dependent clause (“If treatment is not sought quickly”) and its independent clause (“dehydration can result in delirium, seizures, and even death”).

Example Question #41 : Inserting Or Deleting Content

1 Dehydration is a potentially serious medical condition that arrives when a patients’ metabolic processes are disrupted by a lack of water in the body. 2 What can cause dehydration? 3 Dehydration can be caused by overexertion, sickness (vomiting or diarrhea), or sun exposure; among other factors. 4 Treatments for dehydration include: drinking small quantities of clear fluid and intravenous hydration. 5 Symptoms of dehydration vary by the severance of water loss, but the most common signs are increased thirst, a swollen tongue, dizziness, weakness, and fainting. 6 If treatment is not sanctioned quickly dehydration can result in delirium, seizures, and even death. 7 Dehydration is most often a problem in the developing world, where insect- and water-borne disease and a lack of accessible medical care causing many preventable infant fatalities.

What sentence would provide the best conclusion for this passage?

Possible Answers:

All things considered, dehydration is a condition that should never be treated with nonchalance.

Without regard, dehydration must be considered the bane of people with dizziness.

All in all, symptoms of dehydration may often mimic the symptoms of other, more serious diseases.

Therefore, dehydration should be investigated more closely by medical professionals.

Overall, dehydration is a growing concern in the sports-medicine industry.

Correct answer:

All things considered, dehydration is a condition that should never be treated with nonchalance.

Explanation:

All of the sentences except “All things considered, dehydration is a condition that should never be treated with nonchalance” are too specific for the passage; they all hone in on an aspect of the passage that is not the main topic. (The word “nonchalance” means casualness, unconcern, or indifference.)

Example Question #42 : Inserting Or Deleting Content

1 Dehydration is a potentially serious medical condition that arrives when a patients’ metabolic processes are disrupted by a lack of water in the body. 2 What can cause dehydration? 3 Dehydration can be caused by overexertion, sickness (vomiting or diarrhea), or sun exposure; among other factors. 4 Treatments for dehydration include: drinking small quantities of clear fluid and intravenous hydration. 5 Symptoms of dehydration vary by the severance of water loss, but the most common signs are increased thirst, a swollen tongue, dizziness, weakness, and fainting. 6 If treatment is not sanctioned quickly dehydration can result in delirium, seizures, and even death. 7 Dehydration is most often a problem in the developing world, where insect- and water-borne disease and a lack of accessible medical care causing many preventable infant fatalities.

In Sentence 7, what word could be inserted between “accessible” and “medical” without changing the meaning of the sentence?

Possible Answers:

amenable

amendable

attainable

affordable

ameliorable 

Correct answer:

attainable

Explanation:

“Attainable” is a synonym for “accessible,” so it would preserve the author’s original idea. (While “affordable” would make sense in the context, it would alter slightly the meaning of the sentence, so it is not the best choice.)

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