PSAT Writing : Improving Sentences

Study concepts, example questions & explanations for PSAT Writing

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Example Questions

Example Question #132 : Subject Verb Agreement Errors

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

Freud and other advocates of introspective psychology argue that a feeling of connectedness with other human beings, along with a positive self-image, contribute to the overall health of an individual.

Possible Answers:

argues that a feeling of connectedness with other human beings, along with a positive self-image, contribute to the overall health

argue that a feeling of connectedness with other human beings, along with a positive self-image, contribute for the overall health

argues that a feeling of connectedness with other human beings, along with a positive self-image, contributes to the overall health

argue that a feeling of connectedness with other human beings, along with a positive self-image, contributes to the overall health

argue that a feeling of connectedness with other human beings, along with a positive self-image, contribute to the overall health

Correct answer:

argue that a feeling of connectedness with other human beings, along with a positive self-image, contributes to the overall health

Explanation:

The answer choice "argue that a feeling of connectedness with other human beings, along with a positive self-image, contributes to the overall health" is correct. It contains the correct number agreement of the verb "contributes" with its subject, "a feeling of connectedness with other human beings."

The answer choices containing "contribute" instead of "contributes" are incorrect. The subject of "contribute" is singular, not plural.

Although the answer choice "argues that a feeling of connectedness with other human beings, along with a positive self-image, contributes to the overall health" correctly contains "contributes," the verb "argues" introduces a number agreement error, as "argues" is singular but being used with a plural subject, "Freud and other advocates of introspective psychology."

Example Question #301 : Improving Sentences

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English.

Tom, Dick, and Harry all laments the loss of a previous innocence they possessed as children.

Possible Answers:

each lament

all laments

laments

all lament

all lamenting

Correct answer:

all lament

Explanation:

The use of "all" is the key indicator of the correct answer in the sentence. While "Tom, Dick, and Harry" are singular as individuals, they are "all" together sharing their feeling as a plural group; therefore, "all lament" is the correct choice among the answers.

Example Question #302 : Improving Sentences

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

 

Each of the children are playing with a different toy.

Possible Answers:

Children is

Each one of the children are

Children are

Each of the children is

Each of the children are

Correct answer:

Each of the children is

Explanation:

The underlined portion does not show proper subject-verb agreement. Although there are "children" playing, the sentence refers to "each," which is singular. "Each of the children is" is the correct answer.

Example Question #303 : Improving Sentences

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English.

An individual's optimal pulse rate, the study shows, depends on their weight, height, and age.

Possible Answers:

have depended on their weight, height, and age

depends on his or her weight, height, and how old they are

has depended on their weight, height, and age

depends on their weight, height, and age

depends on his or her weight, height, and age

Correct answer:

depends on his or her weight, height, and age

Explanation:

The original text contains a pronoun agreement error. The possessive pronoun "their" is plural, but it is intended to refer to the singular noun "individual." We must use singular possessive pronouns instead, such as "his or her."

Only answer choices "depends on his or her weight, height, and how old they are" and "depends on his or her weight, height, and age" correctly use "his or her" instead of "their," but answer choice "depends on his or her weight, height, and how old they are" does not use correct parallel structure. Therefore, the answer choice "depends on his or her weight, height, and age" is correct.

Example Question #304 : Improving Sentences

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English.

The reason that so many ancient empires no longer exist is that they became too large for its government to collect tax revenues from citizens.

Possible Answers:

is that they became too large for their governments to collect tax revenues from citizens

are that it became too large for its government to collect tax revenues from citizens

are that they became too large for its government to collect tax revenues from citizens

is that they became too large for its government to collect tax revenues from citizens

is that it became too large for its government to collect tax revenues from citizens

Correct answer:

is that they became too large for their governments to collect tax revenues from citizens

Explanation:

The original text contains a pronoun reference error. The antecedent of "its" is "empires," which is plural. We should therefore use the plural possessive pronoun "their" instead of the singular possessive pronoun "its." Only the answer choice "is that they became too large for their governments to collect tax revenues from citizens" correctly uses the plural posessive pronoun.

Example Question #305 : Improving Sentences

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English.

Nearly half of the states in the U.S. have declared English as their official language.

Possible Answers:

as their official language

as their official languages

as its official language

as its official languages

as it’s official language

Correct answer:

as their official languages

Explanation:

The original sentence lacks agreement. “Half of the states” is plural and in the third person, so it should say “as their official languages.” 

Example Question #306 : Improving Sentences

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English.

In many countries, the amount of money the government collects from their taxpayers is relative to individual income.

Possible Answers:

there taxpayers is relative to individuals’ incomes

its taxpayers is relative to individual income

it’s taxpayers is relative to an individual’s income

their taxpayers is relative to individual income

their taxpayers is relative to the individual’s income

Correct answer:

its taxpayers is relative to individual income

Explanation:

Since the government is a thing or institution, the sentence should say “its taxpayers.” The contraction “it’s” stands for “it is,” and therefore, is not possessive.

Example Question #307 : Improving Sentences

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

In addition to helping the environment, renewable resources—such as solar power and hydroelectricity—may also provide an economic benefit, as it may reduce our dependence on foreign oil.

Possible Answers:

as they depend on the reduction of foreign oil.

as it may reduce our dependence on foreign oil.

as they may reduce our dependence on foreign oil.

this being the reduction in our dependence on foreign oil.

as it reduces our dependence on foreign oil.

Correct answer:

as they may reduce our dependence on foreign oil.

Explanation:

The pronoun "it" should be plural because its antecedent is the plural subject "resources." Only two choices correcty change "it" to "they," but one of them, "as they depend on the reduction of foreign oil," confuses cause and effect. The resources are not dependent on the reduction of foreign oil. The correct answer is "as they may reduce our dependence on foreign oil."

Example Question #1 : Correcting Pronoun Antecedent Agreement Errors

Most men who go to sporting events find it an enjoyable diversion.

Possible Answers:

Most men who go to sporting events find it an enjoyable diversion.

Many men who go to sporting events find it an enjoyable diversion.

Most men who go to sporting events find it to be an enjoyable diversion.

Most men who go to sporting events find them an enjoyable diversion.

Most of the men who go to sporting events find it an enjoyable diversion.

Correct answer:

Most men who go to sporting events find them an enjoyable diversion.

Explanation:

The sentence as written contains one small error. "It," a singular pronoun, is used to refer to the plural "sporting events." In order to fix this issue, the pronoun needs to be made plural, which is done in "Most men who go to sporting events find them an enjoyable diversion."

Example Question #2 : Correcting Pronoun Antecedent Agreement Errors

While it can seem like a daunting task to train for a marathon, anyone who has completed the challenge knows that preparing a plan that they stick to is the key to success. 

Identify the answer choice that best improves the underlined portion of the sentence. 

Possible Answers:

preparing a plan that they stick to

preparing a plan and sticking to it

preparing, and having that be a plan that they stick to

preparing a plan that he sticks to

sticking to a plan 

Correct answer:

preparing a plan and sticking to it

Explanation:

In this sentence, the subject is "anyone," a singular pronoun. Therefore, all pronouns relating back to "anyone" should be singular. In the underlined portion of the sentence, "preparing a plan that they stick to," "they" is plural, not singular. Now that we have identified the problem, we have to figure out how to correct it.

Given that "anyone" is gender neutral, the best way to improve this sentence is avoid the use of a gendered pronoun (meaning "he" or "she") and simply avoid using a pronoun at all. The correct answer, "preparing a plan and sticking to it," accomplishes this objective and is therefore the best way to improve the sentence.

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