PSAT Writing : Improving Sentences
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Example Question #541 : Improving Sentences
Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.
Sometimes, we think we know too little, other times, we think we know too much.
Sometimes, we think we know too; little other times we think we know too much.
Sometimes, we think we know too little other times we think we know too much.
Sometimes, we think we know too little somtimes we think we know too much.
Sometimes, we think we know too little; other times, we think we know too much.
Sometimes, we think we know too little other times we think we know too much.
Sometimes, we think we know too little; other times, we think we know too much.
The use of a semicolon is necessary when separating two closely connected indepedent clauses.
Example Question #542 : Improving Sentences
Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.
Each year, fewer and fewer people contract disease due to increased awareness of its specific symptoms.
fewer and fewer people contract the disease
fewer and fewer people are contracting disease
fewer and fewer persons contract disease
fewer people contract disease
fewer and fewer people contract disease
fewer and fewer people contract the disease
The use of the phrase "its specific symptoms" indicates that the sentence is talking about one specific disease rather than the generalized "disease" without an article. Adding the definite article "the" before "disease" is the best way to clear up this confusion, making "fewer and fewer people contract the disease" the correct answer choice.
Example Question #216 : Correcting Phrase, Clause, And Sentence Errors
Select the best answer from the choices given.
The law that was recently passed allows the officer to determine about which actions qualify as assault.
for those actions that qualify as assault
about which actions qualify as assault.
whether assault qualifies as certain actions or not
which actions qualify as assault.
regarding the qualifications of actions as assault.
which actions qualify as assault.
The sentence is most effective if the needless preposition is eliminated, ultimately leaving "which actions qualify as assault" as the best answer.
Example Question #217 : Correcting Phrase, Clause, And Sentence Errors
Select the best answer from the choices given.
Many detectives were dispatched to Nevada for the purpose of investigating a lead that could provide a break in the case.
to investigate
for the investigation of
to investigate on
for the purpose of investigating
to investigate after
to investigate
"For the purpose of investigating" is wordy and could be shortened. "To investigate" is more concise and conveys the same idea.
Example Question #217 : Correcting Phrase, Clause, And Sentence Errors
Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English.
Although the experiment was designed to advance students' knowledge of feline anatomy, Frank felt although the act of dissecting a cat was barbaric.
Frank felt although the act of dissecting a cat was barbaric.
Frank felt that the act of dissecting a cat was barbarically.
Frank felt that the act of dissecting a cats was barbaric.
Frank felt that the acting of dissecting a cat was barbaric.
Frank felt that the act of dissecting a cat was barbaric.
Frank felt that the act of dissecting a cat was barbaric.
Incorrect options:
"Frank felt that the act of dissecting a cat was barbarically.": "Barbarically" is an adverb, but since the choice should be an adjective modifying the noun “act," this is incorrect. "Barbaric" is the appropriate adjective form.
"Frank felt that the acting of dissecting a cat was barbaric.": “Act” here is a noun, so it should not be modified into a gerund. This is incorrect.
"Frank felt although the act of dissecting a cat was barbaric.": The usage of the conjunction “although” makes this an unnecessary and incorrect choice.
"Frank felt that the act of dissecting a cats was barbaric.": “A cats” does not agree because "a" is a singular article and "cats" is a plural noun, so this is incorrect. If this option had been “cats” or “a cat,” it would be acceptable.
"Frank felt that the act of dissecting a cat was barbaric" is left as the correct option.
Example Question #371 : Correcting Phrase, Clause, And Sentence Errors
Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.
The most shocking element of the film was its frank depiction of Medieval Europe violence.
the violence which took part in Medieval Europe.
the violence that is taking place in Medieval Europe.
the violence taking place for Medieval Europe.
Medieval Europe violence.
the violence that took place in Medieval Europe.
the violence that took place in Medieval Europe.
The underlined portion of the sentence is oddly worded and unwieldy. The sentence can be greatly improved by simplifying the word choice and making the meaning more clear. The best answer choice is "the violence that took place in Medieval Europe."
Example Question #543 : Improving Sentences
Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.
Having been that which was the one that lost, the driver congratulated his opponent.
Being that which was the one that lost,
Having been one that lost,
Having been that which was that lost,
Having lost,
Having been that which was the one that lost,
Having lost,
The underlined phrase is extremely wordy and overly confusing in its structure. The phrase needs to be simplified while keeping its intended meaning and being grammatically correct. "Having lost," is the only answer choice that does this.
Example Question #373 : Correcting Phrase, Clause, And Sentence Errors
Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.
Unlike that which was considered true in the ideas of the past, the new theory revolutionized scientific thinking.
Unlike ideas considered to be true in the past,
Unlike that which was considering true in the ideas of the past,
Unlike that which was considered truth in ideas of the past,
Unlike that which considered true in the ideas of the past,
Unlike that which was considered true in the ideas of the past,
Unlike ideas considered to be true in the past,
The underlined portion of the sentence is extremely wordy and needs to be simplified. The simplified version of the sentence, though, needs to keep the same meaning of the original sentence and be grammatically correct. The only answer choice that does this is "Unlike ideas considered to be true in the past."
Example Question #371 : Correcting Phrase, Clause, And Sentence Errors
Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.
Having been seen to be a figure like a prophet, his writings were well preserved by his followers.
Being seen like prophet figure
Having seen a figure like a prophet
Being seen as a prophet-like figure
Having been seen as a prophet-like
Having been seen to be a figure like a prophet
Being seen as a prophet-like figure
The underlined portion of the sentence is awkwardly worded and confusing. Rge entire phrase needs to be cleaned up and simplified. "Being seen as a prophet-like figure" is the answer choice that best simplifies the wording without changing its meaning.
Example Question #372 : Correcting Phrase, Clause, And Sentence Errors
Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.
Under condition of anonymity, the informant gave the testimony against the people that were once his former employers.
against the people that were his once former employers.
against his former employers.
against the people that once were his former employers.
against people that once were former employers.
against the people that were once his former employers.
against his former employers.
The underlined portion of the sentence is oddly constructed and poorly worded, although there are no grammatical problems. This portion of the sentence needs to be simplified. "Against his former employees" is the best choice among the answers.
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