PSAT Writing : Improving Sentences

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Example Questions

Example Question #281 : Correcting Phrase, Clause, And Sentence Errors

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

Invented in China over three centuries ago, explorers and trade merchants alike have used the compass as a navigational tool.

Possible Answers:

Invented in China over three centuries ago, the compass has served as a navigational tool for explorers and trade merchants alike.

Invented in China over three centuries ago, explorers and trade merchants alike used the compass as a navigational tool. 

Invented in China over three centuries ago, explorers and trade merchants alike have used the compass as a navigational tool. 

Invented in China over three centuries ago, both explorers and trade merchants alike have used the compass as a navigational tool. 

Invented in China over three centuries ago, explorers and trade merchants alike use the compass as a navigational tool. 

Correct answer:

Invented in China over three centuries ago, the compass has served as a navigational tool for explorers and trade merchants alike.

Explanation:

The original text contains a misplaced modifier. When we have a modifying phrase at the beginning of a sentence, such as "Invented in China over three centuries ago," we know that the noun that appears right after that phrase must be the thing that the modifying phrase describes. In this case, this means the thing that was invented in China over three centuries ago. 

All of the answer choices except "Invented in China over three centuries ago, the compass has served as a navigational tool for explorers and trade merchants alike" make is sound as though explorers and trade merchants were invented in China over three centuries ago, which is not correct.

Example Question #83 : Modifier Placement Errors

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English. One of the answer choices reproduces the underlined portion as it is written in the sentence.

A popular tourist destination, Edward Hooper used Central Park as the subject of many of his paintings.

Possible Answers:

Edward Hooper used Central Park as the subject of many of his paintings. 

Edward Hooper has used Central Park as the subject of many of his paintings. 

Edward Hooper has used Central Park to be the subject of many of his paintings. 

Edward Hooper used Central Park to be the subject of many of his paintings. 

Central Park was the subject of many of Edward Hooper's paintings. 

Correct answer:

Central Park was the subject of many of Edward Hooper's paintings. 

Explanation:

When a sentence begins with an introductory modifying clause, such as "A popular tourist destination," the noun right after that clause must be the entity that the clause describes—in this case, Central Park. Otherwise, an error known as a "dangling modifier" is created and the sentence becomes confusing and ambiguous.

Only the answer choice "Central Park was the subject of many of Edward Hooper's paintings" places the subject "Central Park" immediately after the modifying introductory clause and avoids confusion and ambiguity.

All of the other answer choices make it sound as though Edward Hooper is a popular tourist destination, which is somewhat silly and definitely incorrect.

Example Question #271 : Correcting Phrase, Clause, And Sentence Errors

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English.

Caring for a pet, responsibility is something children can learn.

Possible Answers:

Caring for a pet, responsibility is learned by children.

Caring for a pet, responsibility is something children learn.

Responsibility is something children can learn by caring for a pet.

Caring for a pet responsibility is something children can learn.

Caring for a pet, responsibility is something children can learn.

Correct answer:

Responsibility is something children can learn by caring for a pet.

Explanation:

With the sentence phrased the way it is, the thing that is "caring for a pet" appears to be "responsibility." This dangling modifier needs to be changed to make it clear that "children" are "caring for a pet." The correct answer choice is "Responsibility is something children can learn by caring for a pet."

Example Question #281 : Correcting Phrase, Clause, And Sentence Errors

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English.

“If it’s all right, I’d like to quietly sharpen my pencil,” said Peter to his science teacher.

Possible Answers:

I’d like to quiet sharpen my pencil

I’d like sharpening my pencil quietly

I’d like to sharpen my pencil quiet

I’d like to sharpen my pencil quietly

I’d like to quietly sharpen my pencil

Correct answer:

I’d like to sharpen my pencil quietly

Explanation:

The infinitive verb “to sharpen” should not be split in half by the adverb “quietly,” or any other word. The adverb must be moved elsewhere so the infinitive is not split. The “-ly” ending on the adverb is necessary because without it, “quiet” remains an adjective and is grammatically incorrect.

Example Question #1 : Correcting Misplaced Or Interrupting Modifier Errors

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English.

Mrs. Higgins, even though she was mortally afraid of sharks, went to the ocean beach every weekend.

Possible Answers:

Even though she was mortally afraid of sharks, Mrs. Higgins

Even being mortally afraid of sharks, Mrs. Higgins

Mrs. Higgins, even though she was mortally afraid of sharks,

Mrs. Higgins, who was mortally afraid of sharks, 

Mrs. Higgins was mortally afraid of sharks and 

Correct answer:

Even though she was mortally afraid of sharks, Mrs. Higgins

Explanation:

The problem with the original sentence is that the phrase “even though she was mortally afraid of sharks” interrupts the flow of the main clause. The sentence runs more smoothly when it is placed at the beginning. It is important to preserve the coordinator “even though” in this sentence, because it is key to the logic of the statement. This answer choices that change this are incorrect.

Example Question #3 : Correcting Misplaced Or Interrupting Modifier Errors

Ascertaining the meaning of ancient writing is often beyond the reach of even the most learning scholars.

Possible Answers:

the most learning scholars.

even the most learned scholars.

even the most learning of scholars.

even the most learning scholars.

even scholars most learning.

Correct answer:

even the most learned scholars.

Explanation:

The underlined phrase has a problem with the phrase "most learning." The phrase is describing the word "scholars." While the scholars might have "the most learning," this would make them "the most learned." The correct answer is "even the most learned of scholars."

Example Question #3 : Correcting Misplaced Or Interrupting Modifier Errors

Studies that have shown pets can help people with problems such as depression and anxiety.

Possible Answers:

Studies that have shown pets can help people with problems such as depression and anxiety.

Studies have shown pets that can help people with problems such as depression and anxiety.

Studies that have shown pets can help people with problems as such as depression and anxiety.

Studies have shown that pets can help people with problems such as depression and anxiety.

Studies that have shown pets can help people with problems such as depression or anxiety.

Correct answer:

Studies have shown that pets can help people with problems such as depression and anxiety.

Explanation:

The insertion of "that" between "studies" and "have" makes the sentence unclear and strangely incomplete, as the sentence essentially becomes a dependent clause. By placing "that" after "shown," the sentence becomes much more clear and appropriately makes the dependent clause after the main body of the sentence. The correct answer choice is "Studies have shown that pets can help people with problems such as depression and anxiety."

Example Question #1 : Correcting Misplaced Or Interrupting Modifier Errors

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English.

Only the time that will work for everyone is in the evenings.

Possible Answers:

Only the time that will work

Only the time which will work

Only the time that will be working

The only time that will work

Only the timing that will work

Correct answer:

The only time that will work

Explanation:

The insertion of "only" at the beginning of the sentence creates confusion as to exactly what it is modifying. The word should be moved to make it clear it is modifying "time," which is the way the sentence makes the most sense. Therefore, the correct answer choice is "The only time that will work."

Example Question #1 : Correcting Misplaced Or Interrupting Modifier Errors

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English.

His manner of speech was like exactly his grandfather's.

Possible Answers:

His manner of speech was like exactly his grandfathers.

His manner in speech was like exactly his grandfather's.

His manner of speech was like exactly that of his grandfather's.

His manner of speech was like exactly his grandfather's.

His manner of speech was exactly like his grandfather's.

Correct answer:

His manner of speech was exactly like his grandfather's.

Explanation:

The placement of "exactly" in the sentence is confusing, as placing it after "like" makes it seem as though the manner was almost exactly or kind of exactly. By placing "exactly" after "was," the comparison between the two manners of speech is more clear, making the correct answer "His manner of speech was exactly like his grandfather's."

Example Question #611 : Improving Sentences

Replace the underlined portion with the answer choice that results in a sentence that is clear, precise, and meets the requirements of standard written English.

The new information confused the merely investigative team working on the case.

Possible Answers:

The new information confused the merely investigative team working on the case.

The new information merely confused the investigative team working on the case.

The new information confused the investigative team merely working on the case.

The new information confused merely the investigative team working on the case.

The new merely information confused the investigative team working on the case.

Correct answer:

The new information merely confused the investigative team working on the case.

Explanation:

The word "merely" is dangling in the middle of the sentence, seemingly modifying nothing and making little sense in the sentence. The word should be moved to indicate a clearer usage of the adverb. The place where the word makes most sense is between "information" and "confused," so it is clear that it is modifying the verb "confused."

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